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« Reply #105 on: June 09, 2013, 03:03:31 AM »
*in best airport announcer voice* Good morning everyone, it is my pleasure (not really) to present you with the last actual chapter of First Flight. An epilogue will soon follow. We are happy you enjoyed the book and we thank you for flying with us. *big grin*
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Sorry, I've always wanted to do that at some point. ;D

Chapter Thirty-five

When Saffa and Rose logged off and got back to the Computer lab, which now heavily reeked of gunpowder, they could hear voices shouting things downstairs.

“No doubt Austin’s been found,” Saffa said tersely.

Rose laid a comforting hand on her sister’s shoulder. “Relax. They’ll probably rule it a mugging or something. That sort of thing always happens here in the holidays.”

They cleared browsing history and cookies, shut down the computer, then took a look at the back of the CPU – and found a device somewhat like one of those Chinese-made portable Wi-Fi transmitters plugged into one of the USB ports. Saffa yanked it out and looked it up and down, and found the initials L.M. on the back.

“What a smart-ass,” Saffa said softly. “Of course... Lewis Miller was in the hardware department. He found a way to make the teleporting device, a little chip, portable. Ah well. I think Richard will know what to do with this,” she said, tucking it into her pocket.

Rose turned invisible and calmly walked down the stairs, out the front entrance and all the way back to the girls’ building, while Saffa morphed to hawk and took off out of the open lab window into the cool night air. She flew over the football ground, but did not look down. But the thing with hawk hearing was – you could still catch conversation clearly even a hundred feet up.

“I know thees boy – Austin Connor,” a voice Saffa recognized as the boys’ warden was saying. “He comes out for football practice sometimes in the early mornings.” Good Lord, was it morning already? Saffa had hardly realized, what with the time flying by in RAF.

“Yes – and then before he could do anything, he got shot,” a female voice said, which Saffa realized was the principal. “Poor boy. And his poor mother. First her husband, and now she has to lose her son too.”

Saffa felt like ramming herself straight into the nearest wall. She felt like such a creep, dragging a completely innocent person into this madness, and now being the one to cause his dear mother so much grief. If she could have kept it all a secret – at that wedding party, if she didn’t tell Austin anything, and fought the monster with only Rose for assistance, if she hadn’t shown him Miller and RAF… he could have lived, gone on to do his duty… she didn’t even get the chance to tell him she loved him. Had he even realized it? She’d never know.

She shook her little hawk head and angled towards the open door of her bedroom. The glowing numbers on her digital clock read 1:13 AM. Rose, she noticed, was already peacefully sleeping, fully clothed, on the mattress they had managed to squish into the dorm. It was definitely not going to be as easy a sleep for her.

Surprisingly enough, she had a sound, dreamless sleep, and awoke the next morning to find Rose pouring hot water into a cup of instant noodles. “Breakfast is served,” she announced. “Slept well, I hope?”

“Actually, I did. No doubt Mum’s gonna be calling?”

“Oh, she’ll call all right; these things don’t need the morning paper to get around fast. Though we can’t possibly go home – there’s no one there. I think I’ll check in with Judy and see if she can put up with me for two days. What’ll you do?”

“I’ll ask Sonal. Gotta make a phone call from the office – see ya,” Saffa said, putting down her cup.

On her way back from the office, she caught up with Sam, the eleventh-grade Commerce student who had been staying back (but was now being called back home by similarly over-anxious parents), and had heard all about last night’s investigation from the warden, who, in a surprisingly kinder tone (miracles would never cease), had also told the three boys to get back home.

The warden had just recovered from a splitting headache – Saffa figured this had been from her punch, but didn’t say anything – when he heard gunshots, screamed, and then rushed upstairs to check if any of the boys were fooling about and that all three were safe. Finding that scene okay, he decided to check the grounds – and that was when he found Austin Connor lying still and bloody against the goalpost.

Naturally, the first thing the warden did was to run to the principal’s house, bang on the door and wake her up and lead her to the shocking scene. The police were called, and they were not too impressed at carrying out an investigation at such a ridiculous hour, but carried on anyway. They found several broken windows, with the glass of a sixth-grade classroom one even swept neatly underneath the cupboard, and a back door that had been shot clean through from the outside. The only other open room they found was the Computer lab, and they did find a bullet in a wall, but nothing further. Quite clearly, the muggers had been after the computers again.

“Again?” Saffa said, cutting Sam off. “You mean this has happened before?”

“Yeah, last year, in the hols. Someone stole a CPU and a monitor one evening. There was a tenth-grader there – Rajesh, he left – who was looking for his Computer notebook in the lab when they attacked him with a kitchen knife. He survived, but they managed to make off with one system. Apparently they got in through a hole in the fence.”

“So they’re finalising it as muggers.”

“Yeah. Of course, nothing’s been stolen, which is good. Just Austin’s bad luck, I guess.”

“Yeah. You could say that.”

Four hours later all five students were on the train back home, Saffa and Rose accompanied by Mrs. Agarwal till their station, who even got them driven to their respective friends’ houses – India was no country for young women roaming around alone. Sonal was more than happy to take Saffa in, since she realised how much she would be hurting.

At about six o’ clock that evening, a group comprising three young boys, an older woman, and a church priest walked through the grass of the town cemetery, the priest leading the group in prayers which Jason, Abhay and Peter duly followed, their voices cracking on a few words.

Mrs. Connor remained silent, instead, gazed at the two tombstones next to each other, one smaller than the other, yet both held in equal pride by the onlooker. For their owners had both played their part in saving the world.

She was lost in her own thoughts while the prayer went on, till she heard the flap of wings overhead, and looked up to see the distinct silhouette of a biggish bird of prey, its broad wings outstretched against the setting sun, clutching something in its talons.

The bird angled downwards, skimming the tops of the trees that dotted the graveyard, and Mrs. Connor could now see clearly its russet-red tail. It flew over the heads of the group and dropped its parcel on the smaller grave, and took off into the air.

They looked at the flowers that had dropped from above – a pale purple bunch of jacarandas, the official flower of Pretoria, South African capital.

Mrs. Connor looked back up at the sky, where the hawk was still lingering. She gave it the smallest nod of her head, and made a gesture of peace with her hand.
That was enough to reassure Saffa.

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Re: First Flight
« Reply #106 on: June 09, 2013, 03:36:11 AM »
I got teary eyed this chapter.
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« Reply #107 on: June 09, 2013, 03:45:33 AM »
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Holy Crap. I Made Underseen Cry.

Okay.

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« Reply #108 on: June 09, 2013, 10:46:03 AM »
I got teary eyed this chapter.
Ya, I did too. Very emotional chapter. :')
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« Reply #109 on: June 10, 2013, 02:44:10 AM »
Thank you. I had no idea I could write like that. But I guess it's true what they say, experiences make you a better writer.

Not really feeling up to the epilogue today - after running up and down the city for various photocopies needed for my university admission, plus bad posture at the laptop has resulted in an aching shoulder. :facepalm: Need to correct that. Plus, South Africa's playing Pakistan in the evening and we really need to win to stay alive in the tourney. Will be tomorrow for sure. :)

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« Reply #110 on: June 11, 2013, 01:23:56 AM »
Morning all! The good news was: we won! South Africa stay in the hunt, and my nails are now green and gold. :P ;D The bad news is: I'm winding this up today :( so here's the epilogue...

Epilogue

“Up in the air – there’s a fielder underneath it – he takes the catch!” the commentator was saying excitedly. “That’s Dale Steyn’s third wicket – he’s on a roll! Pakistan in a spot of bother here, 119 for four…”

Saffa looked at Cricket South Africa’s giant screen, grinning and doing a small whoop. It had actually been quite a satisfying day; apart from this fantastic score, she had also been to see Richard earlier and had gotten rid of Lewis Miller’s wireless teleporter, which she had discovered at the bottom of her suitcase when she had unpacked back home.

Richard had marvelled at the ingenuity of the device, shown it around to every RAFian who had been present at the time, and then taken it to his profile thread.

“You know how dangerous this technology can be…” he had begun.

“Yeah, yeah. I think we went over that one already.”

“Exactly. So I think it’s best I keep it here,” Richard had decided, locking it in a cabinet in his room. “It will be safe here, until we decide if we need to do anything further with it.”

“Like what? Destroy it?”

“Oh, no, no. It can be a useful thing in emergencies,” came the reply. “Now you shove off. There’s been enough melodrama in your life, you might as well go enjoy yourself. And that’s an order, Saffa!”

So Saffa decided to go watch the match in a place she wouldn’t have to fight with Rose over the TV remote. She was enjoying herself, having snagged some cheddar cheese popcorn and a tall glass of cold coffee from a cookery website and lounging in the chair behind the newsreel desk watching the match, when she felt the air shimmer behind her.

She whipped her head round to see that a man had appeared from the direction of the ‘Player Profiles’ area. He was well-built, not very tall, good-looking in spite of his balding crop of brown hair and scruffy beard, with well-set teeth and twinkling eyes. In other words, he looked exactly like the man in the life-size portrait of one of the SA captains on one side of the desk.

Saffa shook her head and grinned. Not AB de Villiers.

“The Ellimist,” she said matter-of-factly.

“Funny you should be back here, Saffa,” the Ellimist said, in a South African marbles-in-the-mouth accent.

“Funny you should be here, and you didn’t fool me. The captain’s on the field, directing his troops,” Saffa shot back, gesturing at the giant screen. AB – the Ellimist – smiled. “I just took a form that would suit this site.”

“Uh-huh. Thanks for making me suit this site. Lookie me! I’m glowing!” Saffa said sardonically. When she got no reply, she turned her attention back to the score, and got a commercial break instead.

“There was a line in Julius Caesar,” she mumbled offhandedly. “Cowards die many times before their death… the valiant taste of death but once.” She turned to the Ellimist. “I was a bloody coward, wasn’t I? Going after him on my own and kicking the bucket here.”

“That depends on how you look at it,” the Ellimist said simply. “In the end, everything worked out, didn’t it?”

“Very funny. I should be counting how many strings you pulled. I’m pretty sure you twisted the investigation appropriately. And when we fought the kitty monster? No one even noticed we were gone.”

“You are quite a bright one, Saffa.”

“Tell me something I don’t know,” Saffa retorted. “Like exactly why you are so enigmatic about everything.”

“The same reason you are so blunt about everything.”

“Ha-ha. Hilarious. Clears up everything.” Saffa paused for breath. “I’d like to know something.”

“Yes.”

“Why did you let me live that day? You could’ve easily left me where I was and not changed anything the Drode did. So why did you do what you had to?”

The Ellimist stepped forward. “You humans are a surprising species,” he said. “You divide your planet into countries. And your countries’ governments fight wars, human against human. It becomes the same everywhere, it spreads to the common people, the idea that people of various nations are meant to dislike each other.”

“And we fight, we win, we lose, and we all live happily ever after. So what?”

“So when one human comes along, and forsakes her own country’s ties to save another, for the common good of the world – there are some I’ve seen thinking that way. And the majority, I’ve seen, are here on RAF. And you had just proved your worth by defending South Africa from a barrage of pro-apartheid posts that would’ve been initiated had it been too late…”

Saffa shuddered. “That just spells chaos.”

“It does. And you stopped it from happening.” The Ellimist turned around to leave. “Does that answer your question?”

“Yeah. Yeah, it does.”

Saffa went back to the chair and took a sip of the coffee, when she stopped herself. She turned around. AB – the Ellimist – was still there. Good. It was the opportune moment.

“May I have his autograph?”

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It's been awesome fun writing this, and huge thanks to everyone who read it and loved it - guests included! I love you guys. :)

Oookay, now this is starting to sound like an Oscar acceptance speech! :P For the record, I'm three chapters down on my next - tentatively titled "The Lake Of Secrets" - which is a slightly X-Files inspired RAFfic set mostly here. (Since alien invaders usually seem to have a liking for the US and south central London, why not bring them to India, eh? ;) ) My plan is to draft out how much ever I can, coping with university schedules, as possible in Word - it's a work in progress as it gets posted, since I am such a bladdy perfectionist with my writing. :)

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Re: First Flight
« Reply #111 on: June 11, 2013, 07:15:01 AM »
Wohoo! You go Saf. I really like the last line in the story, and I am so glad you are continuing it. :D
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« Reply #112 on: June 11, 2013, 08:55:25 AM »
Well, I'm not continuing this book as such, but a different one... but yeah, you get the picture. :)

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« Reply #113 on: June 11, 2013, 06:55:02 PM »
Ya, you knew what I meant. :)
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« Reply #114 on: June 23, 2013, 12:06:32 AM »
I realize I'm a bit late to the party, but I just finished reading this (very nearly all in one sitting, and certainly all in the same day), and I can't really help but comment.

First off, I'm extremely flattered and touched that you drew as much inspiration as you did from my fic.  :-]  Yet, at the same time, managed to take that same 'universe' in such a different direction that you truly made it your own.  Very well done.

Secondly, your RAFself?  Awesome!  It's the weirdest thing, but not more than a couple nights ago I actually had a dream about an Animorph having two 'natural' forms.  Weird, huh, that you had already written the same thing?  And I love the South Africa-based powers, too.  Diamonds, that was brilliant.

Third, I loved reading about life in India!  It was probably the next best thing to actually visiting, the way you describe daily life.  So strange, to look at life from the perspective of someone living in another country (lol, we Americans are so self-centered, we never think about things like that otherwise).

Fourth, the characterization was beautifully compelling.  It was easy to believe that the characters were based on real people because they just felt so believable.  Austin.  :'(

So, yeah, all in all, pretty much an awesome fic.

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« Reply #115 on: June 23, 2013, 03:40:00 AM »
Oh wow, thanks a million, Dino - you have no idea how much that means to me, considering you're the one who inspired it all! You've definitely inspired me to write more - and, yes, all with the Indian background and all the quirks that come with it. :) :)

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« Reply #116 on: July 05, 2013, 11:53:58 AM »
Sorry 'bout the double post, but I just wanted to put up the PDF of the whole book - for the convenience of anyone who would like to save it for offline reading. I'll be putting it up in my profile thread later as well, along with my other RAFfic-PDF projects (only Cloaky's Memoirs of a RAFian for now, Dino's Enter RAF will be put up when it's completed). NOTE: The PDF contains a deleted scene - a portion I had to edit from a chapter since it made the chapter too large. :P

Keeping college schedules in mind, expect my next, The Truth Is Under Water, next year only. Sorry. ::)

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« Reply #117 on: July 05, 2013, 12:31:02 PM »
Okay! Cool!
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« Reply #118 on: July 05, 2013, 09:35:18 PM »
Oooh, I'm gonna need to see if I can find that deleted scene!  :D

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« Reply #119 on: July 05, 2013, 09:38:46 PM »
Lol, after deleting it I ended up merging two chapters, so you'll find one chapter extra.