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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #870 on: September 07, 2012, 01:20:24 PM »
Awesome chapters.  :)

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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #871 on: September 07, 2012, 02:31:18 PM »
Thanks, Gazzy and Noelle.

Oh, new page, so --

  • Book XVII: The Last RAFian
  • Book XVIII: Hostages Wild
  • Book XIX: The Clone Wars
  • Book XX: The Darwin Gun
  • Book XXI: Other Side of the Tracks
  • Book XXII: Pits of Terror
  • Book XXIII: RAF Comix
  • Book XXIV: The First Master
  • Book XXV: RAF -- The Musical
  • Book XXVI: Outage Outrage
  • Book XXVII: Infinity and Eternity
  • Book XXVIII: The Virus Rings
  • Book XXIX: Soul-Suckers
  • Book XXX: Mayhem of the Music Miser
  • Book XXXI: The Metal-Maker
  • Book XXXII: Richard is Missing
  • Book XXXIII: Emotional Food
  • Book XXXIV: Transformation Confrontation
  • Book XXXV: Richard's Horn
  • Book XXXVI: Feral Scream
  • Book XXXVII: Predators and Prey
  • Book XXXVIII: A Protean Problem
  • Book XXXIX: The Horsemen
  • Book XL: Sizeable Pain in the Necks
  • Book XLI: RAF's Nightmare
  • Book XLII: Unlucky Charms
  • Book XLIII: The Piper
  • Book XLIV: The Wishing Star
  • Book XLV: A War of Armor
  • Book XLVI: The Worst Plague
  • Book XLVII: Little Alien Napoleons
  • Book XLVIII: Go Away!
  • Book XLIX: RAFian Tales
  • Book L: Maul
  • Book LI: Erised Orbs
  • Book LII: RAFians Alive!* -- an out-of-normal-continuity book
  • Book LIII: The Pain Reliever*
  • Book LIV: Beyond the Veils*
  • Book LV: Dangerous Deals*
  • Book LVI: Of One Mind*
  • Book LVII: The End of Time* -- another out-of-normal-continuity book
  • Book LVIII: Hematomimic*
  • Book LIX: Sins of Youth*
  • Book LX: The Replacements*
  • Book LXI: Arachnoids*
  • Book LXII: Personal Tissues*
  • Book LXIII: Memory Today, Gone Tomorrow*
  • Book LXIV: Appliance Armageddon*
  • Book LXV: Prodigy and Composite*
  • Book LXVI: The Merging*
  • Book LXVII: Be A Doll*
  • Book LXVIII: RAF Captors* -- yet another out-of-normal-continuity book . . . unless I change my mind.
  • Book LXIX: Dinosaur Island*
  • Book LXX: Corrupted*
  • Book LXXI: Artificial Skins*
  • Book LXXII: Separation Anxiety*
  • Book LXXIII: A Thing About RAFians*
  • Book LXXIV: A Planted Idea*
  • Book LXXV: Vacation Photos*
  • Book LXXVI: A Personal Gremlin*
  • Book LXXVII: The Rust is Silence*
  • Book LXXVIII: The Toyman Cometh*
  • Book LXXIX: RAFian Idol* -- yes, just another excuse to put in more of the (as of writing) nearly 800 parodies.

Again, the (*) denotes a book I have yet to do the chapter-by-chapter notes for.  If you want spoilers . . . well . . . I might consider it in PM.  A new chapter will come tomorrow -- if I don't get too busy.
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Book 189: "Shenecron's Pets"
Chapter 4: "First Attempt"
(January 7, 2020)

RAFians Referenced Specifically: Demos.

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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #872 on: September 07, 2012, 05:03:02 PM »
You are so devoted to these, that is good.
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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #873 on: September 07, 2012, 11:25:19 PM »
I suppose so, Underseen.  As I've said many times before, RAF is such a fertile ground for ideas. . . .


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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #874 on: September 08, 2012, 12:05:18 AM »
Mhm, still surprised you have 70+ planned... That would take about 1 year.
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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #875 on: September 08, 2012, 11:35:48 AM »
That's only assuming that I don't quicken the pace any time soon, and don't run out of idea.  Or don't veto some books, like I've done with some parodies (nearly 800!) -- I vetoed the one where Horse basically tells the RAFian version of Star Wars. . . . Perhaps I will quicken the pace again, once I get a more comfortable chair -- this one I'm sitting on now really hasn't much comfort.

CHAPTER SEVEN:
The Enceladian Andalbeest

"Sire, the dragosaurus was --"

"Don't finish that sentence, Bubbles," Rotiart snapped.  "I'm well aware!  But at least that slag-spoutin' saurian* got what she deserved."

"Her survival doesn't seem likely, according to the data received."

Rotiart waved this off, "Makes no nevermind to me.  My magnum opus is nearly complete. . . ." Rotiart said, ending with an almost reverent tone when he gestured toward the largest tube that was steeped in darkness and shadows.  "Just three little RAFians to do away with, minions."

Then he walked up to the computer interface, and spoke in a sharp, commanding tone, "Computer, is there Andalites alone?  Mark-bearing Andalites?"

"Searching . . ." came the cool female voice.

He glanced ruefully at the spiky red "B" no emblazoned on his palm where the blue "R" of the Mark used to be.

"Located -- designate Noelle -- at the coordinates." the computer's voice said in a rather stilted way.

"Excellent, launch and send the Andalbeest toot sweet."

"Sire, I don't think that's how you say --" Bubbles began before Rotiart smacked him so hard that his head was left spinning literally.

"Don't you correct me, you mindless automaton."

***

Noelle was outside RAF, running, prancing through a field, grazing as Andalites are apt to do.  She seemed fairly relaxed and more confident in her abilities than she may have been 25 years ago.  But she did not come out this far from RAF unarmed -- she wasn't stupid.  She carried a fully-charged Shredder, and she had her tail and her morphing.  She was pretty confident that she could handle anything that came up.  And, if she couldn't, she was in thought-speak range of her fellow RAFians.

So she continued to feed, and exercise -- there hadn't been any real incidents that happened to her knowledge . . . only because she didn't know the incidents with Parker and the technovore, Gaz and the cruxpalm, Blaze and the muklok, and Dino and the dragosaurus.  She continued to graze in blissful ignorance of the danger that approached her with alarmingly rapidity.

It was the loud crash and thump that grabbed her attention.  It came from the forest.  She had her stalk eyes dutifully scanning her surroundings . . . she was horribly reminded of the Xenomorphic-Brood encounter years before.  She suppressed a shutter.  She watched as blacks smoke curled out of the edge of the forest.  She narrowed her main eyes, squinting to see through the smoke.  She did not call out to it -- experience told her that doing such would be a very stupid idea.

But then the colossal beast rushed out from the forest, standing on four large, spider-like legs, with smaller leg-like appendages extending from its abdomen.  Its head was rather like that of a rhino, only with the horn being of bone, not keratin.  It's mouth was horrendous enough to cause a Taxxon to faint from looking at it.  It had a smooth, thick-looking back with a camel-like hump, which apparently was nothing but a mass of muscle.  The skin was granite-gray and craggy-looking, almost like bark.  It issued a bloodcurling roar rather like a high-pitched tyrannosaur roar with some bear in it.

Noelle felt something she hadn't felt in a long time.  Terror.  Mind-numbing terror.  She tried to scream for help, but found that her thought-speak no longer worked!  This creature must have some sort of biological thought-speak dampener built into it.  She could not think how -- she's never seen a creature like this before now.

She whipped out her Shredder and fired it at the creature.  It just warmed its skin!  It did nothing, but annoy it!  Noelle kept firing it until the charge was gone.  Then she threw it, and it found itself inside the creatures mouth.  The andalbeest just swallowed it with no worry or hesitation.

This is NOT good, Noelle thought to herself.  And with the thought-speak dampeners, it's the only communication she could do.

It rushed her, but she sidestepped and struck it with her tailblade.  It left a streak in the creature's side, but it did not bleed, it did not wince, it did not wail.  The cut simply sealed itself in twice the time it would have taken Demos.  Noelle blinked all four eyes in surprise and shock, realizing she couldn't do anything to this beast!  She couldn't defeat it.  She couldn't defeat it.  No Andalite could!

. . . No Andalite could, huh?  Hmmm . . .  Noelle concentrated on the picture of a polar bear, and waited for the changes to happen.

But they never did.  The same thought-speak dampeners must have a morphing field dampener as well!

Well, this is just dandy!  Just . . . peachy! Noelle thought savagely.

She tried to run away, but this creature was faster than her.  She tried again with her tailblade, but the creature easily dodged, and slashed her with the surprisingly sharp legs, leaving several gashes in her side, and her right rear leg was now useless.  The pain was intense.  If she could only morph it away!!  If she could only morph it away!!

She stumbled and fell on her side.  She looked up with her left stalk eye and saw the beast looming over her.  She tensed her body, preparing to feel the first bite -- but it never came.  Noelle opened her eyes, all four of them, wondering whether the creature was enjoying torturing her when she saw it rear up and explosions rip its back.  It didn't seem able to heal from burns like it could from cuts and slices.

"You chose one HECK of a dancing partner, Noelle," a voice said.  She knew that voice.  But she still couldn't speak, not that she didn't want to.

"What's with the silent treatment?" the same voice said, helping her right herself.  It was Blue -- Blue had thrown exploding shurrikens that caused the beast intense pain to which it was unaccustomed.  "Oh, hold on a minute, Big Ugly's not dead yet."

Blue withdrew is ninjabo, and began to hack the creature apart. . . . Apparently, the touch of admantium was like a branding iron to its skin.  Within a few minutes (which included Blue using his favorite ninja trick of vanishing in a puff of smoke and leaving a log in his place), Blue had thoroughly taken care of the beast.

<Ah,> Noelle gasped in pain, relieved that she could thought-speak again.  She did a quick human morph and back again.  The pain vanished, and she was pleased.  <Much better.  And I can talk again.>

"What?  You couldn't talk?"

<As best as I can figure, that creature had some sort of thought-speak dampeners, as well as morphing field dampeners.>

"That's possible?"

<Apparently so.>

"Well, this has to be told to the others," Blue said, and Noelle agreed, <Let's go.>

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*Yet another Beast Wars reference.
« Last Edit: September 08, 2012, 12:29:36 PM by CloakedFigure »


Book 189: "Shenecron's Pets"
Chapter 4: "First Attempt"
(January 7, 2020)

RAFians Referenced Specifically: Demos.

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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #876 on: September 08, 2012, 12:38:32 PM »
I liked the ninja fight scene.

Edit: As I reread the earlier chapters for fun, I realized that there are 8 'robot masters' to fight. Megaman Reference? Plus how the 3 Mavericks from X2 are being parodied. I am kinda happy how clever this reference is.
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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #877 on: September 09, 2012, 12:53:47 PM »
Edit: As I reread the earlier chapters for fun, I realized that there are 8 'robot masters' to fight. Megaman Reference? Plus how the 3 Mavericks from X2 are being parodied. I am kinda happy how clever this reference is.

:wow:

Uh . . . that wasn't intentional, actually -- at least, not consciously.  It was more of a happy accident.  You're gonna get a +1 for pointing that out to me, Underseen.

I just realized the latter part of the book is also very much like the end of a Mega Man X game . . . wow.  And it isn't like I haven't played them (well, except for X7 and X8). . . . Wow, I never noticed this. . . .

CHAPTER EIGHT:
The Ouranosian Vortexsapien

"Infernal ninja," Rotiart cursed, while the other three cowered quietly.  "But we've got the data.  That's all that matters."

"Computer, is that star nearby?"

"Designate Estelore is presently leaving Earth space at a rather slow stellar pace," the cool female voice announced.

"Then quickly shoot the vortexsapien into geosynchronous orbit!"

"But, boss," Bubble attempted to interject, "won't that raise notice from the planet's governments?"

Rotiart glared at him and detached his legs, because they were too valuable to break.

"I withdraw the question," he muttered very quietly.

"Do it now!  Kill the star!"

The other three were well aware of the potential horrible consequences of such an action, if successful, could be for the world.  But they didn't have the courage to stand up to Rotiart, who seemed to lose some sanity after his Banning.  He didn't care if he adversely affected the world, as long as he got his vengeance.

***

Estelore was leaving the Earth, prepared to go onto one of her long intergalactic sojourns.  She was, at her core, a curious person with a touch of the explorer in her.  Her fellow RAFians knew this and accepted this about her.*  Cloak even asked her to make notes, so she could update the RAF species database when she returned.  Her destination this time was Andromedan space -- Cloak mentioned to her, in an aside, that he he thought that Orishans, Amperi, Talpaedans, Geochelone Aerios of the planet Aldabra, and Prypiatosian-Bs inhabit that area of space.  This had her intrigued, though Cloak already created entries for all the species that B'nt listed, using his knowledge of the species from another realm that similar species (if not identical species inhabited).

Estelore felt the exhilarating thrill that comes from being able to explore somewhere, maybe finding and discovery a new species on a new planet.  She lived for the rush of discovery.  Her power was just something that enabled her to peek upon these newer worlds.  She could understand, if any one could, why Realm Walkers first began to Walk the realms.

But she wasn't too far -- not even outside the solar system, when she sensed something.  Some strange creature that rivaled her in size, who had a strange power of its own.  She wasn't sure of it's level power, but she was not arrogant enough to believe that no one could equal her in power -- after all, she was just one of millions of stars and -- though she had yet to meet one -- she presumed she wasn't the only sentient one.

She saw the creature that pursued her.  It would have been indistinguishable from a black hole, only it held what appeared to be a wholly green cyclopean eye in its center, and had two smoky claws extending from it's black hole-ish body (which wasn't black at all, but the color of rust, with black accents).  Estelore said nothing, as spoken voices do not carry in the vacuum of space -- unless you're a Lantern, apparently.

Estelore prepared herself, knowing full well -- from her experience as a veteran RAFian -- that the creature was preparing to attack her.  The creature, in a flash, reached out with it's clawed smoke hands and struck!  The claws found their mark, and Estelore reacted in shock.  It actually hurt.  It hurt a great deal.  The strike could even be seen from the surface of Earth.  The non-RAFians did not know what to make of it.  Parker's youngest son, Troy, saw this, and declared it as, "Pretty."

"That's nice, Troy," Parker said, as an adult would to a young child without looking up from his work.  "Now play quietly while Daddy and Pierce rebuild our armor."

"Dad, you know we probably could've punched that thing."

"I nearly lost an arm trying to do that to a Veleek," Parker scolded.  "Who's to say that wouldn't have happened this time."

"Ooooh . . . pretty . . ." Troy said, still looking at the sky.

Back in the battle, Estelore wasn't fairing as well as she would have liked.  She was injured, rather severely, but it wasn't fatal.  She was unaccustomed to feeling pain.  She was unaccustomed to battling such a beast like the vortexsapien.  She knew that she wouldn't be able to beat it alone, and it pained her to admit it to herself.

But suddenly a ship appeared and zapped the creature.  Estelore immediately recognized the ship and tried to gesture Yarin to get away and save himself.  The vortexsapien attempted to pull the ship into it's vortex maw.  Yarin seemed to allow this, but Estelore attempted to stop it.  But she was weakening and could not get over there fast enough.

<Do not worry, Esty.> Yarin said, telepathically.  <I have a plan.>

<YARIN, NO!> Estelore said.  <You've no idea the power this thing -->

<Oh, I'm well aware of the power.  But Cloak fetched for me a certain special item . . .>

But before Estelore could question Yarin about, a small iron-gray ball with dull blue core with a black core sheath.  It hat "MMX3-GBGW" written on it with spiky black letters, and in, what Estelore assumed, Nyac script.  The ball was easily sucked into the the beast, but right beneath the creatures gelatinous eye it opened and started feeding a black energy into the creature that seemed to have an adverse reaction to it.  The beast was sucked into the gravity well that the ball produced.  Then the ball collapsed it and the gravity well.  Then the ball disintergrated itself into nothingness, leaving space as empty as it was before.

<Wow.>

<Okay, Estelore, encapsulate yourself into your avatar form, and we'll take you to Kelly.> Yarin instructed.  Estelore complied, although her avatar reflected her beat up and bloody condition.  With that they flew back to the forum.

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*Yes, this is the premise of why Estelore isn't in ALL the "Memoirs" books.  Just like the premise for whenever Aquilai or Aila is absent is that they're off having adventures in time and space.
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Book 189: "Shenecron's Pets"
Chapter 4: "First Attempt"
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RAFians Referenced Specifically: Demos.

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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #878 on: September 09, 2012, 02:22:11 PM »
I have beat all the X games, and the naming of the creatures actually sound like real enemies.
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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #879 on: September 09, 2012, 02:25:28 PM »
Well, I just based the names on the RAFians that they're supposed to be the "banes" of.  And there are only two more to go.


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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #880 on: September 09, 2012, 02:52:31 PM »
Makes sense... I am probably going to play X5 tonight, all the MegaMan talk got in my head.
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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #881 on: September 10, 2012, 12:57:00 PM »
Right.  I know it's been a couple of hours, but I'll see about getting Chapter Nine (featuring Sakki and the Sakki-Bane) out of the way soon.

CHAPTER NINE:
The Clytian Berserker

The three subservient to Rotiart quietly breathed a sigh of relief, while Rotiart was only appeased by the data received from the battle.

"Only two more to go . . ." Rotiart said quietly looking at the two creatures left.  He patted the right hand tube, saying "I'll save this one for last . . ."

"Alert.  Mark-Bearer presence detected 54.6 meters away from this location.  Sensors show that it is designate Sakki and --"

But the computer's voice was drowned out by Rotiart's whoop of laughter.  "This is just perfect!!  Just so perfect!!  Computer, unleash the berserker at those coordinates!"

"Uh, sir, do you think that wise?" Magnus said, rather hesitatingly, as if he was speaking against his better judgement.

"Are you QUESTIONING me?" Rotiart said, gnashing his teeth on the word "questioning".

"No, sire!  Not at all!  But --"

"Oh, shut up, you overlong, doddering pile of mismatched parts." Rotiart spat, and Magnus said nothing, but clearly took offense.  "Computer, do it!"

"Executing commands now."

***

Sakki looked over the area where the old carnival that once sheltered the Bibliophaetos once stood.  It was now fully abandoned and basically a wasteland of trash and tattered dreams.  Sakki found that she didn't like it much, but Demos said he thought it wasn't too bad.  They had separated to conduct isolated investigations.  This didn't seem to be a good idea, but Sakki never much bought into horror movie superstitions.  She was as tough as they come.

But a few minutes into the investigation, she was feeling annoyed.  There was nothing here.  Yarin's equipment must be glitched . . . it couldn't pinpoint the location that the several other creatures seemed to spawn from, but this seemed to obvious a site.  There would be no reason to build anything here of any significance.

"Well, this was a pointless waste of time," Sakki muttered waspishly.

She sensed it before it struck.

She dodged to the left, and rolled away, then unto her feet.  She glared at her new foe.  It had a visible acanthite skeleton swaddled in transparent-to-opaque, gelatinous, puke green flesh with no visible eyes or mouth but a rudimentary-looking head.  It held several weapons inside the gelatinous flesh -- a steel battleaxe, a claymore sword, a couple of obsidian daggers, a vibranium lance, a couple of admantium sais, a katana, a bo staff, a couple of nunchucks, and more.  Making this beasts eight arms look like a cluttered mess.

"You're really ugly, you know that?" Sakki said, trying to get a rise out of the creature.  But the berserker lacked the intelligence to register Sakki's comments as insults.  What it was waiting for, Sakki had no clue.  But she prepared herself to fight, and was astonished with just how quickly the creature could move -- the gel flesh was about as heavy as styrofoam apparently -- only far more disgusting.

Sakki hadn't enough time to make quips during the battle -- it was all she could do to just dodge the blows and strikes.  The beast did not tire -- but she knew that she would.  Eventually.  Her reflexes would slow, and . . . it wasn't pleasant to think about.  It felt like forever, but the beast reacted so quickly and attacked so relentlessly, that Sakki couldn't counterattack.  What was worse was that this thing seemed to be aware of all her moves, of all her techniques.  This was not going so well.

"Demos!" she chanced -- and got a nice, long, lovely cut down her leg.  But Sakki wasn't fooled -- it was sheer luck that her leg was still attached.  Sakki didn't know when she could chance another call.  But that one cut was followed by blunt smashing and more cuts.  She had lost her rhythm for dodging.

"Demos . . ." she said faintly.  "Demos . . . get your . . . butt . . . over here . . ."

It was not good, this beast wasn't gonna just beat her into submission.  It was gonna . . .

"Hey!  Goo-blob!" Demos shouted.  "I think we need to heat things up!"

Suddenly, the berserker got very warm.  So very warm that it forgot about Sakki and began to stumble away.  But Demos didn't let up -- he had saw the condition the thing left Sakki in, and, in his turn, got very, very angry.  His flame was now accented with black.  Then it became hellfire.  The creature's flesh began to boil.  And, within minutes, it boiled away and its "skeleton" shattered with it's weapons (except the vibranium and admantium).

"Demos . . ."

"Quiet, Sakki.  We've gotta get you to Kelly."

"Demos . . ."

"Hush now."

With that, Demos scooped Sakki in his arms, and dashed back to the forum.
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Book 189: "Shenecron's Pets"
Chapter 4: "First Attempt"
(January 7, 2020)

RAFians Referenced Specifically: Demos.

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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #882 on: September 10, 2012, 03:32:01 PM »
(I've been reading this whole time)
Nice chapters :) I like how these banes are well thought up, almost like the Silent Hill monsters.

Now for model updates:

[spoiler]
Me: Completed
Cloak: Base still needed
Blue: Base, parts and items still needed
Underseem: Same as Blue
Darth: Yeah...about that armor... ^_^;
Horsie: Almost done, just need to put everything together and test it
Shadow: Finding bases that are just right for her, then clothes and hair
Kelly: Need info on her, I have an idea for the effect to use for her healing
Demos: Needs EVERYTHING [/spoiler]

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Re: Memoirs of a RAFian
« Reply #883 on: September 10, 2012, 03:51:32 PM »
I like how these banes are well thought up, almost like the Silent Hill monsters.

Well, I can honestly say that they weren't based on any of the Silent Hill monsters because I haven't seen any of the films or played any of the games.

Truthfully, I wait until I write the chapter to come up with the bane creatures' descriptions (only using a vague description of them in my notes).  The berserker, I admit, has some resemblance to the Rainbow Devil from the Mega Man series.  And that's where the eye idea came from for the vortexsapien.

And, glad to see your work is comin' along, Sakki.  I can't wait to see the finished product.

Oh, and be sure to pay attention to the list at the top of the page -- I do intend to write all those books if I can.  (Let's face it -- this series'll probably be my magnum opus.)  But anyway, pay attention, because (unless this is moved to a different page), I'll update that if I chose to veto (i.e. take out) a book or add an additional one (more likely).  Please note, some of those books will be "out-of-normal-continuity" books, like this one.
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« Reply #884 on: September 10, 2012, 07:01:09 PM »
Oh, that is nice Sakki! Will there be a site to view the models when you are done?

Great update, I was thinking of MegaMan Zero before I read this, so I knew what was going on. I am really interested in what book XXIII will be like. The title makes me think...
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