um...is there a reason you made the same thread in the animorphs section?
Yeah. I wasn't sure where to put this. Now my thraed over their got deleted and it was probably your fault again because you're a... Here I go on. I'm shutting up now but just know that I was ready to insult your regularly annoying self.
Can't you ever shut up and quit asking about the content of the question and actually answer the question? How does anyone here put up with you?
By the way, did any of you thrree realize that you never said if my idea was good or not?
Dude. Not cool.All I'm going to say about that. And by the way, the only question you asked in your original post, was about the title, (which I did not care for) not about your story idea.
That being said, I will try to give some feedback about your idea.
Overall, I don't like it.
First of all, leaving out the
Rachel battle except for little hints can't happen. Even if it doesn't happen right away, you have to get deep into it because the fans need and want to know what happened.
I don't mind the characters being older. They would be around 30 not the 24-26 you thought. If you remember in The Beginning, there was a few years between the pool ship battle and the One, making them about 19. Anyways, this was the one idea of yours that I liked. It would definitely put a new spin on things. We spent a lot of time with kids fighting a war, lets see how they do when they're older.
Like someone else, said, I'm not sure that I can see a mixed Andalite/Human fleet. It seems awkward. Obviously there would be a lot of contact between the two races and that sort of thing which adds to the story, but it seems too soon for things to have become so integrated. Maybe just Ax and one or two other Andalites with the Human ship and vice versa. However, I think that after so long, Jake would be tired of war and wouldn't want to lead so much. But his responsibility wouldn't let him leave completely but I see him as taking more of a desk position and commanding from the back, not the frontlines.
Next, you can't cut out Tobias and/or Cassie. You just can't. Regardless of whether or not you like them, they have to be included because they are a central part of the story and have huge relationships with the other characters. It would be like when they made the Superman movie, if the screenplay writer didn't like Lois Lane, so he just didn't include her. Doesn't work. You take the whole work, or none of it. If you want to write them out somehow, like if they died, that's one thing, but you can't just leave them off in the shadows.
I don't see the Tobias/Melissa thing, I really don't. To me it just doesn't work. But Tobias' sadness/loneliness over Rachel seems to be the perfect reason for him to want to wander space, searching for answers.
As for Cassie, there are so many things possible with her character. Her past relationship with Jake could cause a lot of tension between the two whenever they are together. Jake and Cassie will always love each other no matter what they say, so there is a lot of opportunity there. Plus, if Cassie is still in politics, decisions or policies that she makes can affect her friends in the field, therefore further complicating relationships and possibly clouding her own judgement when trying to be a good politician.
Sorry about this being such a long post but you wanted feedback so there it is. I think your idea needs some serious rethinks and overhauls to make it work. But that's what writing is, editing and revising. I don't think it was all that great of an idea, but that's just me.
