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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #45 on: August 30, 2011, 10:21:20 PM »
Watercolors seemed to fall out of the sky and paint the city. Famous landmarks were created, as if by the brush strokes of some painter. Rukh and I were standing on the Stature of Liberties Torch, with a fantastic view of the whole island. It was weird but I could really feel the enhanced senses. I had eagle like vision and hawk-like hearing. Far away I could see arny and ani standing on top of the Empire State Building. I decided to test what else I had. "Let's see how the range is on our powers." Rukh grinned in response but then his look changed to confusion. "How do we use them?" I pondered the speech and replied "I think we just have to think about them. Focus on getting the maximum distance." I squinted at the building and focused on a ireball. Roughly a quarter of the distance a ball of fire the size pf a basketball appeared mid-air. Beside it a similar one, made of electricity. "That's the best we can do?" He said in disbelief. I smiled at him. "Dude if we could use them at any distance, I could just hide somewhere and set someone on fire until they die. Let's try to launch the energy at them." I focused on the fireball shooting forward. It arched back like an invisible slingshot was being drawn by an invisible four year old.

In my head their was a solid TWANG! and the shot launched at a good one hundred twenty miles per hour. Ani reacted faster. He jumped in front of his partner and held out his hands as if tat would stop it. Right before it would make contact I noticed an odd shimmering in the air in front of him, "THWOK!" As if the fireball had mass, it made a thump as it collided with Ani. I was feeling pretty good until the fire cleared. They were both completely unharmed. "What the....?" I sputtered out. Then realization hit me. The guy took the same power as me, the force shield.
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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #46 on: August 31, 2011, 01:43:22 AM »
just wanted you to know: ko ko read it

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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #47 on: August 31, 2011, 09:04:10 AM »
so thoughts? opinions?ranch dressing?
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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #48 on: August 31, 2011, 09:32:02 AM »
RANCH DRESSING! RANCH DRESSING! RANCH DRESSING! RANCH -- erm...

Anwho...I thought it was good. :) Is that electricity my arc lightning? I love electricity. ^^ Omniuseful, :XD:
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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #49 on: August 31, 2011, 09:37:34 AM »
Yay ranch dressing! Yes that is your lightning. I've had some very dramatic fight scenes planned out for months....
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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #50 on: August 31, 2011, 02:02:56 PM »
thoughts? like deep thoughts? i have no deep thoughts. regular thoughts? i'm sorta waiting for you to get past the battle part. i hate ranch dressing

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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #51 on: August 31, 2011, 06:03:38 PM »
how bout italian?
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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #52 on: August 31, 2011, 08:54:04 PM »
i don't like dressing. if imma put anything on a salad, it's olive oil

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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #53 on: August 31, 2011, 09:49:08 PM »
So how did you feel about the "invisble four year old" line?
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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #54 on: September 01, 2011, 12:19:00 AM »
it didn't stand out to me when i read it initially. i tend to notice more your grammar errors. now that you point it out, it's just silly, but there's nothing wrong with that

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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #55 on: September 01, 2011, 09:19:46 AM »
What I try to do is throw in a joke once in a while, like KA. Too me it's a simple way to keep readers attention
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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #56 on: September 01, 2011, 10:42:56 AM »
What I try to do is throw in a joke once in a while, like KA. Too me it's a simple way to keep readers attention

Agreed. But what's this about an invisible four-year-old? Did I miss something?
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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #57 on: September 01, 2011, 03:10:39 PM »
I focused on the fireball shooting forward. It arched back like an invisible slingshot was being drawn by an invisible four year old.
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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #58 on: September 02, 2011, 08:54:43 AM »
Aha. Ok.
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Re: RAF 2.0
« Reply #59 on: September 04, 2011, 10:54:17 PM »
The fight was on. I fell into my best 80's kung fu movie pose. Rukh raised his fists, arnold pulled what looked like an AK47  and aniken laughed at my pose. I stopped the fancy footwork and backed to the other end of the railing. I started sprinting toward the other side. Right before I cracked a rib on the railing I raised my leg and placed my foot on the railing. Then I pushed . I must have looked like some kind of massive dove. Pheonix wasn't kidding when he said we would have enhanced strength. I went a good thirty feet straight up and slowly arced downwards until I was doing a swandive from 300 feet. The rush was insane. None of this was real but it felt that way. The wind rushed by me and I was practically high on adrenaline. I was going to spend a lot of time here.
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