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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #60 on: April 26, 2011, 02:27:48 PM »
First thing, i must say. I apologize for how completely mentally disabled i seemed, now that im looking back at it plus rereading what I posted...i still think the way he is now is an amazing character. The reason I think he really seemed to click in my head as fun to try is because yes he is REALLY smart, but still compared to the tech of alien races mankinds smartest mouse would probably pose the same amount of a problem.

Second, as i asked before. What should i specifically get rid of? If its at all possible i would LOVE to keep him at least a quarter of his current intelligence. Like would it be good if I just went back through and whacked off half of the college accomplishments n stuff?

I sound like a kid most likely but i dont know I just think the amount of time i could probably play this character specifically, would be immense. Personally I think right now that he is slightly flashy and over the top with his smarts, but that could make a good plot twist later...not my rp tho so yeah
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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #61 on: April 26, 2011, 02:36:47 PM »
i modified my post about acquiring him.
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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #62 on: April 26, 2011, 02:55:30 PM »
Alright...

     First, let me run you by a phrase frequently used by people all over the world: show, don't tell. While it seems like you do have some interesting characters--despite how unrealistc they seem-- but you didn't have to include the occupation and histories of characters who AREN'T going to appear in the RPG in such great detail (Your character's grandparents and parents).

     Secondly, your character's intelligence seems to surpass any other individual found not only on earth, but on even the Andalite homeworld. A child prodigy is one thing, but usually, where prodigies seem to excell in one type of area--the maths and sciences-- they aren't as successful in the arts. What you've created here is a person boardering on greek hero of myth. Also, very rarely have two "super geniuses" produced other "super geniuses". I doubt intelligence is inherited, but that's just MY way of thinking.

     Thirdly, while I am not entirely sure of the limit of majors and minors allowed in universities and colleges--even for "super geniuses"-- I know that the school I got into limited EVERYONE to:

     1) A specialist degree-no minors or majors
     2) A double major and a minor
     3) A double minor and a major

     Your character taking so many difficult courses, spanning different subject areas is, without intending to sound mean or rude, laughable. No person born of fiction or reality is capable of such a workload. No matter what the person's intelligence, this is simply not done.

     Here's a few things that hint at Mary-Sues:

     1) First and foremost, they seem to be talented at everything; winning special awards and obtaining a certain popularity.
     2) Hair colour, eye colour, height: unrealistic colouring [hair, eyes: blue, red, pink, rainbow, etc] that seems to make them flawless. Think anime characters...Basica lly your Mary-Sues.
     3) Special weapons, powers and objects: Super intelligence, computers that seem much more advance than any other character's--and somehow develop sentinence-- daggers and swords that are, apparently always on hand, etc.
     4) Odd pets: Snakes, dogs and cats that follow the character everywhere, wolves, bobcats, eagles, hawks, etc, etc, etc--in short, animals that cannot be trained, or seem attached to this ONE character.

     Also, you may want to keep your posts (whether on here or on the forum) short and sweet. Some people might find reading very long posts to be a chore.

     It really bothers me when I have to critique like this. I don't like pointing out flaws in other people's ideas, or things like that. You didn't sound like a mentally disabled kid. Your character seems great...if he were an Olympian. Lots of people have trouble with original characters. This is exactly the reason fanfic readers dislike reading stories about original characters--they're done poorly.

     If you're really interested in participating, take more time to think about your character. You don't have to rush, because we haven't even become Animorphs yet. Give it a few days to think it over. Don't give up. A lot of trimming and touch ups and you MIGHT just have something.

     Also, I couldn't help but point out that, despite your characters SUPER intelligence....HE STILL GOT INFESTED :p
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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #63 on: April 26, 2011, 05:28:41 PM »
Um....did we just acquire the ability to morph from an Andalite named Lars?
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I find that hilarious.

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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #64 on: April 26, 2011, 05:37:09 PM »
     Lol. Did you acquire the power yet?

     Anyone want to vote to change it to something else? Maybe Elfangor?
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« Reply #65 on: April 26, 2011, 06:01:15 PM »
I'm typing up that post now. :)

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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #66 on: April 26, 2011, 08:49:38 PM »
I just had a thought. What about Visser 3?
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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #67 on: April 26, 2011, 08:50:40 PM »
     *facepalm*!

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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #68 on: April 26, 2011, 08:52:12 PM »
Oh I KNEW there was something missing.... haha. XD

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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #69 on: April 26, 2011, 09:43:44 PM »
((Before I post next, do you think I could have Larz' DNA? because I'd probably be trying to nab that in rl before I left. :P just wondering.
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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #70 on: April 26, 2011, 09:49:25 PM »
     I don't know...If you'd make the decision in real life, then I guess so...

     Still, one of us morphing an Andalite...

     Let's put it to a vote.
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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #71 on: April 26, 2011, 09:57:14 PM »
Sounds good.

Reasons why I might vote positive: I would try to acquire the DNA of the fallen Andalite War-Prince in rl; As, I assume, we are going to have a policy against morphing sentient beings and morphing for pleasure, I wouldn't use that morph so often; It might be useful if ONE of us had this morph.

Why I might vote negative: If I have it, its hardly fair that no one else gets it; it's kind of a power morph...like morphing a Giganotosaurus in the Yeerk pool and stomping on all the controllers.

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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #72 on: April 26, 2011, 10:53:06 PM »
haven't read the RP yet, so bear with me. (pun intended, as always). In real life, I'd acquire and use an Andalite morph regularly. Frankly, I wouldn't feel any remorse over using another sentients form, *ESPECIALLY* if they allowed me to acquire them as our Andalite friend has. If I was fighting the Yeerks for real, I'd probably have at least 5-10 human morphs easy. I wouldn't hesitate at all, if it meant saving the planet and entire human race. So, if we're making this our decisions, our story, then I vote yes, acquire him! But... this isn't my RP, so TMP does get to choose. If you say so, I'll drop that part, even though that was part of the reason I decided to trust him at all.

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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #73 on: April 27, 2011, 06:39:12 AM »
@Gorilla: I'm still there. We're in the middle of a vote, so I'm still there.

@BlazingAngel: Hey man we're in the middle of a vote. :P. Your moving faster than the speed of Plot! :XD:
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Re: RAF Can Morph: Post Character Descriptions and Questions/Comments Here
« Reply #74 on: April 27, 2011, 07:55:33 AM »
I probably wouldn't acquire it because I wouldn't realize the opportunity. But I have nothing against the others doing it. I have to agree that it would be a power morph. I'm nuetral.
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