Eh, it varied from reviewer to reviewer. I won't say that it was my best piece, because I wrote it days after reading The Beginning. And I hadn't figured out the nuances of Fanfiction.net's formatting system, so it was basically a block of text that I wouldn't force captured enemy spies to read.
Really, it just played on the idea of Crayak's focus on Rachel. I could rewrite the idea and expand on it, but I've been avoiding fanfiction of late to focus on my original stuff.
