I finally got around to reading your poems, and I have to admit I liked them. Particularly "Fish Food" and "Hear-." I liked the comparison between a fish and an idea, that was quite original.
Just a few things I'd like to point out, though. Not really criticism, just minor spelling errors. Errors which would probably not even register with anyone but me, but I'm just a bit OCD that way. I just thought you should know.
In "Awaken," veiw should be view, and livinging should be living.
In "Fish Food," intriuge should be intrigue, semds should be sends, it's should be its (no apostrophe), and wich should be which.
In "Beach time epiphany," seagulls should be seagull's (with an apostrophe).
In "Hear-" deaths should be death's in both cases.
And in "War poem," ryme should be rhyme.
Anyway, like I said before, these poems are good, so don't be bothered by me pointing out things.
