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A24: The Advance
« on: August 14, 2008, 12:08:06 AM »
Well I've been flapping my gums about this fic for long enough, and it is finally here! Hope you guys like it!

Inspired by the show '24'. This isn't a crossover and you don't have to watch or like 24 to read/enjoy the fic. It's merely Animorphs in the 24 format; traitors, twists, terrorists, bigger plots and conspiracies all occurring in 24's real-time format. It will comprise of 24 hour long chapters, where everything occurs in real-time. Not jumping from place to place or hour to hour every minute of this day will be action packed and exciting!

THE FOLLOWING TAKES PLACE BETWEEN 1:00 P.M. AND 2:00 P.M.

Events Occur in Real Time.

1:00:00 P.M.


Jacob focused on the music blaring from his headphones, trying to focus on the song. He thought back to when he was a kid, when his parents would fight, this was how he escaped from it all. He needed to escape now more than ever, and he silently wished that he could.

“Hey kid!” a stern voice called, sounding almost confused.

Jacob was leaning against the wall of a building; shattered glass lay at his feet. To his right was a window that was smashed in with a brick. It must have set off some kind of alarm. Jacob looked up as three men approached him, all dressed in blue suits. He eyed the guns strapped to each of their waists, and then he eyed the badges worn on their chest.

“What the hell do you think you’re doing?” one of the security guards asked him. He remained silent.

Another guard reaching up to the radio strapped to his shoulder, “Hey we just got to the break, its just some kid,” he said, eying the window Jacob had broken, “yeah I don’t know what his deal is, we’ll let you know.”

“What’s your name k-“ the third guard began to ask, but before he could finish there was a sound from the forest behind them, and he jerked forward unexpectedly.

The other two guards spun around towards the direction the muffled gunshot  had come from, as their friend toppled forward and collapsed onto the ground. Jacob watched it all as if in slow motion; before either guard to get their guns drawn, several more shots blew out of the forest, striking them precisely in the chest. Blood blew out of their backs, splattering the wall to either side of Jacob. He looked down and saw a red streak across his chest; the blood of the first man.

The man was crawling towards him, wheezing his breaths laboriously and fighting for every inch of the ground. He reached up to Jacob with his radio in hand, “Help,” he managed to groan.

Jacob could only stare at him as three figures stepped out of the cover of the dense forest bushes. He looked up at the man, who was pointing a gun lazily down at the guard. He didn’t have to kill him, Jacob could say so, they didn’t have to do it. BAM BAM Two more shots to the mans back, and he slumped at Jacobs feet.

The man looked up at Jacob with dark eyes, “Good job Jacob.”

“Jacob, wake up,” Raul said, looking at Jacob with a concerned face, “we have to hide the bodies, and find their key cards; we need them to infiltrate the building.”

1:04:50 P.M. Forest

Keen hawk eyes scanned the valley carefully, searching every blade of grass for prey. Tobias had grown accustomed to this daily ritual. It was the life of a hawk; the life he had chosen. His own sacrifice for the war. He tried to focus on his search, but felt it was futile. He had been hunting all morning and had nothing to show for it. He would have to resume later—the others would be getting out of school soon. It was a beautiful day for flying; he could take his time getting there.

Then the slight quiver of a blade of grass drew his eye. That was all he needed. His hawk mind focused, calculating every scenario as he lifted off the soft tree branch and took to the sky. Feeling the light breeze fill his wings, he soared across the field, aiming towards his prey. The furry nose stuck itself out of its burrow, exactly when he had predicted. It sniffed the air as Tobias soared overhead, close, but not too close. Sensing the right moment he dipped downwards for the kill, raking his talons forward as the rabbit hopped out of its hole. He dug them in and immediately began feeding on its warm meat.

Feeling something above him, Tobias looked up defensively from his kill. There were other predators in the forest. What he saw was nowhere near another animal—it wasn’t even of earth. Any other human would have missed the slight distortion in the wind overhead. It may have been invisible, but nothing passed through Tobias’ forest without his knowing it. Tobias tried to lift off, but the downdraft coming from the ship was killing all the wind. He struggled for every inch, keeping his eye on the spot he had seen the distortion, where he knew there must be a cloaked ship. Finally giving up his climb, he landed on a low branch. All evidence of the ship was gone, but he knew it was out there. And based on the direction it had been heading, it was moving deeper into the forest. Was it simply leaving town, choosing this as the best direction to travel? Tobias felt more strongly that this was its destination, something was going on in the forest. Either way, he needed to find the others, quickly.

1:09:02 P.M. Biozyme Industries

“Next, we’ll bring you to one of our labs, where we’ll speak to our lead geneticist,” the guide said. She was walking backwards down the hall with a wide, false smile painted across her face.

“Hey, Jen!” Cassie called, speeding up to catch the small girl moving slowly with the crowd of uninterested students. The class was on a field trip at the new biotech laboratory, Biozyme, which apparently was announcing some new breakthrough later in the day.

“Oh, hey, Cassie,” Jen said, looking up from her feet.

“How’s it going?” Cassie asked. She stared carefully into her eyes as they walked down the hall, their tour guide leading them, constantly droning on cheerfully.

“Good,” Jen said.

“You just seem a little preoccupied lately,” Cassie said carefully, then added in a slightly girly voice, “We haven’t talked in like the longest time.”

Cassie hated doing this to friends, but it had become an important part of the war. Unfortunately, if someone was acting weird, it usually meant that they were a Controller. She waited for Jen’s reply, trying to detect any evidence. It was one of her skills, one of the positive things about herself that she had been forced to use against people.

“No, it’s just been a weird time for my family,” Jen said slowly. “My dad hasn’t really been himself lately, always tied up with work, you know how it is.”

“Yeah, I do,” Cassie said, although she wasn’t being completely truthful. Her dad worked from home and always managed to have time for her. However, she knew that wasn’t the case for all parents. Just because he was a little busy didn’t mean he was a Yeerk…did it?

“And may I introduce our lead geneticist on the project,” the tour guide announced, as a round faced middle-aged man came through a doorway, smiling expectantly around at the class, “Dr. Kenneth Walters.”

Cassie looked over at Jen at the announcement of the name. Jen returned the gaze with an awkward smile and a little shrug as if she was silently admitting her embarrassing relation. Jen’s father was average height, wore a few extra pounds around his midsection, and was beginning to bald, but it seemed to suit him well, as he wore a wide smile across his face.

“Hello, class,” he beamed out at them, seeming much more genuine than the tour guide had. “As Ms. Janis has told you, I’m Dr. Walters.”

“Hey, isn’t that Cassie’s friend’s last name?” Jake muttered to Marco, who had not been paying much attention to the man, and had quite clearly not made the connection. Jake looked around and saw Jen standing with Cassie across the room.

“You actually remember her name?” Marco laughed. “I can barely remember my own last name.”

Jake laughed. “Well, who would want to remember a name like-“

“Hey, little bro,” Tom said in a mocking way, coming up behind Jake. “You might want to pay attention. You could learn something.”

“Then why aren’t you listening?” Jake returned automatically, “it seems like you’ve learned a lot less than me.”

Tom laughed and walked back to the edge of the crowd, nudging Jakes shoulder playfully. Jake shoved him back lightheartedly, but as he turned to face the front again, he was stone-faced and livid. Tom and a few other upperclassmen had been assigned to chaperone the field trip. They stood around the group, some combing through the crowd for violations, some just staring into space, as bored as the students were.

“And this new drug,” Dr. Walters continued passionately, treating the class as though they were his board of directors, “will be a cure for virtually all major environmentally based diseases. Using the human genome project, which has been around for-“

“You know,” Marco whispered, looking tentatively over his shoulder for Tom, “this drug sounds pretty good.”

“Yeah,” Jake said, knowing exactly what Marco meant. They had come to realize that anything good that happened around here, might just be too good to be true, “but we can’t check it out now.”
 
1:21:05 P.M. Hork-Bajir Colony

Ark-Telbar moved through the colony quickly, a group of seven Hork-Bajir trailing him. He saw his wife and their child stripping bark from a nearby tree and gazed happily towards them. There were small groups spread throughout the valley, harvesting the bark happily but purposefully. His wife looked up and waved before continuing her work. He would have liked to stop and strip bark with them, but he had something to do. Ark did not understand everything about the fight they were in, but he didn’t have to. He knew that what he and his family had here were good, and that someone wanted to take it away. And he knew that he trusted Toby to keep it safe.

“Toby,” Ark called.
“Hello, Ark,” Toby called, jumping down from a tree to land in front of them.

“Ark found humans,” Ark told her, feeling proud to have delivered the message so well.

“Were they nice humans?” Toby asked patiently.

“No!” another Hork-Bajir from the group chimed in, “bad ones!”
“Captured brothers with them,” Ark explained.
Toby processed the information before turning back to Ark. He was a good soldier, and had gone with Toby on many missions, freeing many of their kind. He was one of the few she could trust to send out alone. “Did they see you Ark?”

“Humans never see Ark!” Ark reported proudly. “Come back to tell Toby!”

“Good,” Toby said. “We have to go back now, and find out who they are.”

“Ark will come,” he said.
Toby knew that this would not be a casual group of controllers. The yeerks would not risk moving Hork-Bajir-Controllers out in the open, even in the forest.

1:25:32 P.M. Biozyme Industries

“I don’t know how good of a time it would be with your head up-“

“Hey, Rachel,” Cassie said, moving through the group towards her. The guy who had been talking to her skulked away angrily.

“Hey,” Rachel huffed, and then seemed to lighten up, shrugging away the apparent confrontation. She was used to it, and hated that it still got her so worked up. “What’s up?”

“Well, I was talking to Jen,” Cassie began carefully. She didn’t want Rachel to overreact, she wasn’t even sure if she was overreacting. “She seems, you know, different.”

“Like, different?” Rachel asked, lowering her voice and looking out for the chaperones, many of whom they knew were members of the Sharing.

“Yeah, and she said her dad was acting differently.”
“So, you think her dad is..?” Rachel asked, implying what she did not want people to overhear.
“Well, that’s him” Cassie said, motioning to Dr. Walters, who had brought out a few large plastic molecule props and was waving them enthusiastically as he supposedly explained what they meant.
“Well he doesn’t seem like one,” Rachel said, but she knew that was a ridiculous statement, nobody seemed like a controller.
“Let’s go to the bathroom,” Cassie said, not wanting to be overheard as they were still closely packed in with the group.

1:28:04 P.M. Forest

The grass crunched under Ax’s hooves as he ran through the meadow, gazing up at the clear afternoon sky. He didn’t normally stare up so much during the day; he saved his homesick stargazing to the night. Lately, he had been confused with his place in this new world. Recently, his shorm, Tobias, had been required to morph into him. Ax was surprised at how powerful an experience it had been for him. He had accepted Tobias’ acquiring of his DNA easier than he would have thought possible. Amazing, how connected he had become with these humans.

Yet, as he began to feel more at home with this world and his new friends, he began to notice more and more the things that were missing. He could never experience these things with these humans.

CRACK

A noise to his right. Ax’s stalk eyes swiveled around as he came to a halt. He had learned to recognize the natural sounds of the forest and he'd disciplined himself not to overreact to the slightest noise. This was different, and as he strained his ears, he began to hear voices. Creeping slowly through the trees, he spotted a small group cutting through the bushes.

“Why the heck are we even here?” one of the men at the back of the group asked. He was tall, muscular and dressed in camouflage. He was also easily the least outstanding member. Along with one other human, seven Hork-Bajir were walking steadily forward, slicing easily through the forest with their many razor sharp blades.

“I’m not going to question him,” the other human said. Ax thought he knew who the man must mean by the way he said ‘him.’ Visser Three, the leader of the Yeerks and murderer of Ax’s brother, Elfangor. “Besides, I’d much rather be down here when-“

A twig snapped under Ax’s hoof as he edged closer. The sound carried to the group, causing several Hork-Bajir to snap their snake-like necks in his direction.

“Ghafrash!”

Ax turned and took off running as all of the Hork-Bajir charged forward, covering the distance to his hiding spot surprisingly fast. Ax had a lead on them, but he knew as he darted through the trees that he could not outrun them forever.

1:35:15 P.M. Biozyme Industries

“Hey man, we might not have time to wait to check this place out,” Marco said, catching up to Jake in the middle of the crowd. He had fallen back from the group as they moved into the lobby, with Dr. Walters still leading them. What had stopped him was a strange feeling that they had missed something.

“Dude,” Jake said, looking around to make sure they weren’t being overheard.

“That’s the thing,” Marco explained, although he lowered his voice, “the chaperones, Tom, all his Sharing pals are gone. Something tells me they don’t need all of them to pull the bus around.”

Jake began looking around, trying to find his brother. Then Marco saw his face turn into a look of horror. “Holy-“

Marco followed his gaze to the front door, and matched Jakes wide mouthed shock. Half a dozen men with machine guns were rushing into the lobby. The tallest of them moved swiftly to the old security guard, who had only just begun to fumble for his gun, obviously unprepared for such a sudden attack. With one swift arc, the man hit the guard with the butt of his gun, sending him to the ground. There was a high-pitched wail as the alarms were activated. One of the men with guns dove over the desk, tackling the receptionist who had activated the alarm. The whole room had erupted into immediate chaos, unsure where to go, the herd of students pressed even closer together. Fear had crippled them, they were unable to do anything but cower and take cover in the thickening crowd. Marco and Jake tried to push their way out of the mass, knowing their only hope was to get clear of the lobby and try to morph. The crowd was pressing in on them, trapping them.

“Everybody down on the floor!” the tall, bald man shouted at the crowd, firing his gun into the air for good measure. The blast echoed around the room as the screams began to subside.

Marco broke free of the crowd and made to run for the nearest door, but he felt something pulling on him from behind. Jake was crouching low, holding Marco’s shirt firmly. He shook his head with a fixed look on his face and Marco knew he was right. It wouldn’t be that easy to escape. He dropped slowly to his knees with the rest of the crowd, but stayed close to the edge.

“Jacob, secure the front door,” Marco heard one of the men say to an unsure looking kid. He was maybe 5 years older than them.

“If everybody stays put,” the tall man continued, quieter now that he had their attention, but even more menacing now that he was able to fix them with that piercing gaze, “this will be very simple. We will not be here long. If anyone tries to interfere, things will get…complicated.”

Several security guards and receptionists were dragged toward the students and thrown haphazardly into the group. One of the men was now working at the computer while the others formed a makeshift perimeter around the group, covering all the exits. The young one, Jacob, had attached a small device to the front door that blinked sinisterly. Marco could only guess that it was an explosive, ready to block an obvious rescue attempt.

“You know I was actually kind of looking forward to today,” Marco muttered to Jake. “A nice break from school, fun time... I don’t know why I do it to myself.”
The man’s voice boomed through the crowd once again, “Kenneth Walters! Dr. Walters, step forward now!”

1:44:45 P.M. Biozyme Industries

“Okay, we need a plan,” Cassie said, pacing quietly in the bathroom. They had heard the gunshots and the shouts, had figured out what was going on.

“Got a plan,” Rachel said, beginning her favorite morph: Grizzly Bear. Yet, even as she did, she knew it wasn’t the right call.

“No, Rachel,” Cassie said. She gave her friend that shocked and saddened face Rachel often saw her wear when she began to show her reckless side.

“Okay, okay,” Rachel said, calming her first instinct to attack. Yet every minute the terrorists, or whatever they were, had in the building, the more prepared they would be for an attack. They needed to do something.

“Check the bathrooms,” said a voice from the lobby. It was loud, Rachel thought, he must have been shouting across the room to someone. Reacting quickly, both Cassie and Rachel jumped into a stall and shut the door.

“Fly,” Rachel hissed, but Cassie had already begun to change.

Focusing on the fly DNA inside her, Rachel began the change as well. She could see Cassie’s lips bulge outward, melting together into a long proboscis tube. With all her talents for morphing, she could do little for this morph. She was able to speed it up considerably, though, and was already about half done as Rachel began to shoot down several feet. As she felt spindly hairs sprout on her back, the bathroom door slammed open. As quietly and quickly as she could on shifting and shrinking legs, Rachel climbed up onto the toilet, just as the man leaned down to peer under the stalls. She caused a soft bump as her shifting mass rolled onto the back of the toilet.

She was about the size of a small dog as the man moved forward, turning towards the first stall, and kicked the door in. Cassie buzzed around above her, <Come on Rachel, you can do this, focus.>

Thud. Another stall kicked in, the man continued forward. Rachel tried to take to the air, unsure if the morph had been completed enough to allow it. She still felt slight shifts going on in her now mostly insect body. The muddy brown boots came to a halt outside their stall. Rachel could hear a little nudge as the man tried to push the door open, then one boot left the ground, and the door swung inwards with a crash. Through compound eyes, Rachel looked up at the man, who looked down at her for a split second, then turned and walked out of the room satisfied.

<Okay,> Rachel said, <that was close. Now let’s figure out what’s going on.>

1:48:57 P.M. Forest

Ax panted as he ran through the trees. He summoned the strength to leap over a fallen tree, and felt his legs ache as he hit the ground again. He had slowed, and he knew he wouldn’t last. The smart thing to do would be to turn and fight rather than waste energy running pointlessly. Coming to this realization, he turned to face the approach of the Hork-Bajir. He came to a stop with an advantage as the lead two came lunging for him. Using his momentum against him, Ax stepped aside, landing a strike with his tail blade as the alien landed behind him. He was not able to subdue the second so quickly and became locked in combat with him.

As he blocked a wrist blade flying at his head with a carefully timed swing of his tail, Ax knew that this was not good. He was giving the others time to catch up, at which point he would be completely outnumbered. He could see several of them swinging through the trees to catch up, but needed to keep his attention on the threat at hand. Blocking a strike before the Hork-Bajir could bring it down, Ax then countered with a downward slice of his blade, dropping his foe to the ground. Five Hork-Bajir now stood around him, each glaring at him and their fallen comrades. They all also aimed Dracon beams squarely at his chest.

Ax raised his head for one final look at the sky before his sure defeat, but was instead greeted by the blinding silhouette of a hawk. The hawk dove downward raking the eyes of the nearest Hork-Bajir. But Tobias hadn’t allowed himself enough space to safely escape as the remaining Hork-Bajir all leveled their beams at him instead. Ax rushed forward, tail raised to help his shorm, but it proved unnecessary. Suddenly, half a dozen creatures descended from the trees above them, landing on top of the remaining enemies.

Hork-Bajir fought Hork-Bajir in a dazzling flash of blades and a spray of blood. Unsure of whom to attack, Ax stood back, watching the aliens fight each other.

<Let Toby handle them, Ax,> Tobias said, perching on a low branch.

<How did you find me?> Ax asked him, relieved Tobias had come to his rescue.

<Ax, did you really expect me to miss a group of six-foot tall, bladed aliens running through the forest?> Tobias joked, <My forest?>

1:58:29 P.M. Biozyme Industries

“Rachel and Cassie aren’t here,” Jake said, having finished a slow scan of the group. That was the first thing, account for the team, and they were two down.

“They must have ditched out early,” Marco said, “like I wanted to do.”

Jake ignored Marco’s second comment, but hoped the first part was true. He knew if they were in trouble they would hear the gun shots, and would just have to hope that they could handle themselves. There was something strange going on, Jake thought. Why guns?

“This is completely unlike the Yeerks,” Jake muttered. “It's too public. What are they trying to gain?”

“I have to say, some of these guys don’t really seem like Controllers,” Marco said, staring at the closest armed man. “So, fearless leader, what do we do?”

2:00:00 P.M.
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Re: A24: The Advance
« Reply #1 on: August 14, 2008, 08:21:20 AM »
Nice work so far Duff. It's an interesting plot, well written and you seem to have fit in the 24 style pretty well. I look forward to reading more.
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Re: A24: The Advance
« Reply #2 on: August 14, 2008, 01:48:57 PM »
Awesome stuff Timmy. Nice to see all that waiting was worth it. :P
Can't wait for thee next chapter!! ;D
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Re: A24: The Advance
« Reply #3 on: August 14, 2008, 02:39:48 PM »
Haha, yes! Super-awesome, dude. Very well done. The writing's all good, you kept it exciting. Everyone's in character.
No criticism, really. It's a little fast-paced, but that's kind of how it's supposed to be, and I think it's fine that way.

So, I'll be waiting for the next chapter. Hopefully this one won't take as long as the last.  ;) :)
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Re: A24: The Advance
« Reply #4 on: August 15, 2008, 05:37:55 PM »
Ok, read it on ff.n, reviewing here because my comp spazzed and quit running the internet for a minute and I'm lazeh.
So, here goes.
I'm not much of a 24 fan, myself, but this was actually pretty fun. Keep it up. I want to read more. I just don't know which site I'll end up reading it on in the future.
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Re: A24: The Advance
« Reply #5 on: August 17, 2008, 05:12:58 PM »
Awesome, Duff. First chapter was worth the wait.
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Re: A24: The Advance
« Reply #6 on: August 20, 2008, 09:03:54 AM »
Lol Ken showed me the trailer by the way.

Haha nice...
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« Reply #7 on: August 20, 2008, 06:26:54 PM »
Yeah, the trailer was pretty cool.
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« Reply #8 on: September 18, 2008, 12:46:04 PM »
Anymore coming, Tiny Tim?
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Re: A24: The Advance
« Reply #9 on: September 18, 2008, 01:28:31 PM »
yea, im gonna force myself to write right now, thanks for the kick anna haha, but gah this hour is so lame, i dont want to write it!

and thanks for all the reviews guys! im glad you like it so far!
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« Reply #10 on: September 18, 2008, 02:34:40 PM »
WOAH!  :o  ;D THIS IS GOOD!
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« Reply #11 on: September 18, 2008, 06:43:05 PM »
By all means, keep going...you're doing a fantastic job^^

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Re: A24: The Advance
« Reply #12 on: September 27, 2008, 12:47:11 PM »
Well here it is guys. Sorry it took so long, way too long. I think things will move a little faster from now on. I appreciate all the feedback and comments guys, and based on a few peoples advice, this one is longer than the first, and I’ll try to keep them around this length or longer for the rest of the story.


Previously on A24

Terrorists have taken over the Biozyme building. At Biozyme on a field trip, Cassie, Rachel, Marco and Jake are now in the middle of it. Ax, Tobias and the Hork-Bajir have discovered the presence of a cloaked ship and a group of yeerks in their forest. Cassie and Rachel manage to morph fly before they are discovered, but Jake and Marco aren’t as lucky. With Jake and Marco held prisoner, the Animorphs must find a way to stop this surprising threat from the inside…


THE FOLLOWING TAKES PLACE BETWEEN 2:00 P.M. AND 3:00 P.M.

Events Occur in Real Time

2:00:00 P.M. Forest


<Are you certain the bindings will hold?> Ax asked, eyeing the blades mere inches from the thick bark strips tying the Hork-Bajir down.

Toby and her group had subdued the Hork-Bajir controllers, and quickly produced feet of makeshift rope to tie them up.

“Yes,” Toby said, in her oddly human tone, “unfortunately, we have been forced to tie up many of our kind.”

<Well you’ll be able to free them too,> Tobias said from his perch in a nearby tree.

<We must determine what to do with the Human-controllers as well,> Ax said, looking at the two humans lightly bound next to their much more dangerous Hork-Bajir companions, <I assume they would not be able to stay with the colony.>

“This has never been an issue before,” Toby said, “We will need some time to think about this.”

<We may have another issue,> Ax said, <we must discover why they were in the forest to begin with.>

<When they wake up, we can question them,> Tobias said, <I don’ know how much use it will be though.>

“We must bring them back to the colony,” Toby said, looking around the forest, “it’s not safe here.”

2:05:07 P.M. Biozyme Industries

<There!> Cassie cried, zooming forward crazily, <that’s definitely Jake’s head.>

<How can you tell?> Rachel asked, but she followed the other fly downward anyway.

<I don’t know,> Cassie said, sounding embarrassed, <It just seems like him.>

<Okay well then lets get in there, I’m sick of just flying around waiting to get swatted,> Rachel said, sounding agitated.

The two flies landing on the shoulder were barely noticeable in the crowded room.

<Jake, we’re on your shoulder,> Rachel said, <try not to kill us.>

After waiting a moment, Cassie said, <Jake, can you hear us? Why would he be moving?>

<Maybe he’s around too many people to be talking to a couple of flies,> Rachel suggested.

“Tenril,” a voice called toward them.

“Has everything gone as planned?” another voice asked, coming from the mouth only inches away from where they sat.

“Yes sir,” the other voice reported, “the building is completely locked down.”

“Good, then let’s begin.”

<Cassie, I don’t think this is Jake,> Rachel said, <I think its Tom.>

2:10:03 P.M. Biozyme Industries

“I don’t see Cassie or Rachel,” Jake whispered to Marco after carefully scanning the room again.

“Lucky them,” he responded, “So they’ll come save us right? I mean, you haven’t done anything to piss Cassie off lately have you?”

“I don’t think saving us should be the top priority,” Jake said, “There is definitely something going on here.”

Suddenly, they both registered a sob to their right. Cassie’s friend, Jen, was curled up in silent fits of hysteria while her friend consoled her.

“Is she okay?” Jake asked the friend, trying to look concerned.

“I don’t know,” the friend responded, she looked to be about to break out into tears too.

“We’ll be okay,” Marco reassured, “we’re the hostages, you can’t hurt the hostages, that’s bad guy rule number one.”

Jake hoped they would take comfort in Marco’s comment, but it didn’t help him at all. It only caused a dozen movies to flash through his head where the bad guys had killed the hostages.

“She’s not worried about us,” her friend explained, “her father, they took her father somewhere.”

“The head scientist guy?” Marco asked.

Jake looked down at Jen again, sobbing in the fetal position, with her hands and face obscured. If he was the head person around here, he would be the one they would start with to get whatever they came here for. Jake didn’t need any movie references to tell him that her dad was definitely in trouble.

“Someone will come,” Jake said emptily, “I’m sure the cops already know what’s going on.”

2:14:18 P.M. FBI Headquarters

“Okay, I understand, yes sir, thank you,” Jonathan Davis finished, staring up at the flustered look of his second in command, Ted Richards.  He was glad to finally put the phone down after just receiving an earful from his boss. He could be quite demanding, and quite threatening at times. “What’s up Ted?”

“We’ve just received word from local that there’s been an attack on Biozyme Industries,” he reported. Ted was a tall, lanky man in his early thirties, but he dressed like Davis’ father; a faded green sweater under a long blue sports jacket.

“Today? Jesus, this has to be about the announcement,” Davis said, pulling himself out of his seat. In contrast, Davis was shorter, and stockier, and still wore the military style hair cut from his years in the navy almost 10 years ago. He pulled a dark grey suit coat off his chair and swung it on as he exited the room. “What do we have?”

“Small group of armed men have apparently taken hostages,” Richards continued, stepping to the side and letting Davis exit the room, “we’ve got a few seconds of surveillance video but apparently at least one of them knows his way around a computer.”

“Any ID matches yet?”

“We’re still working it up but we should have it soon,” he continued as they approached the bullpen, a large collection of stations clustered evenly inside the large, main room.

“Do they know what’s going on?” Davis asked, looking across the room at the team.

“Only a few, I thought that you would want to make the announcement,” Richards said carefully.

“I’m sure they would have much rather heard it from you,” Davis said angrily, sensing the conflict between the two men. Davis had been promoted out of another branch to head this division only a few months ago. He had the feeling that most of the office felt he was under qualified for the job, and most felt that it should have gone to Ted. It sometimes seemed as though they were checking their assignments with him, giving him the unofficial authority.

Ted sighed, not wanted to address the issue. He knew that most of the office trusted him more than Davis, and he knew Davis resented him for it. But there was nothing he could do. He tried to show his support for the head, but that only infuriated him further.

As they came into the large open area of the office, separated into several smaller stations, some of the analysts looked up from their work expectantly. Davis cleared his throat, “Okay people, we’ve just received word of an attack on Biozyme Industries. A team is being sent there now; I need you to work up everything on our end by the time they get there. We need to know what organization we might be dealing with and specifically what they might be after. Most of you know the significance of that building, so let’s see your best work. Your unit directors will give you your individual assignments; I’ll meet with the heads in five minutes. Get to work.”

Turning back to Richards he muttered, “How real is the threat here? I mean could they actually get at this thing?”

“We’ve only brought up a rough outline of the buildings security measures, but it seems like it would be quite safe,” he responded, “Even we don’t know specifically where or how it’s being held, that information is working its way over to us now from Homeland Security.”

“But if they’ve got hostages, then they have the people with access to it, right?”

“Yes, the lead geneticist, a Dr. Kenneth Walters,” Richards said, checking his notes, “would be able to unlock most of the security measures around it.”

2:21:57 P.M. Biozyme Industries
CRACK

Another swift blow to the side of Dr. Walters head sent him spinning to the ground once again. Once again, he was dragged back up to his knees.

“Please,” he mumbled, spit and blood trailing down from his mouth, “I can’t-“

“You can and you will,” a large man leered over him, “the key to your so called miracle cure is here somewhere, and we need you, to bring us to it.”

“But, but why?” Walters pled, “Without the original source we will lose the ability to save millions of lives!”

“That’s not your concern!” the man said, backhanding him across the face again, “let’s just say there are certain people who have a financial interest in it.”

Walters knew what they must mean by this. He had often thought, even marveled, that his cure would be so effective, that it would severely reduce the need for prescription medicine. His work would save people millions of dollars, and cost pharmaceutical companies billions of dollars. Was this why these men were sent?

“Hold out his hand,” the larger man instructed, “on the table.”

Obligingly, the smallest of the three men, gripped his left wrist with shaking hands, and held it firmly on the table. The largest man came back in front of him, now holding a hammer, “All we need are the codes, and if you don’t give them to us someone else will. Why lose a hand over it?”

Walters whimpered slightly, wishing he could look brave, but knowing he probably just looked pathetic, and shook his head. Every thundering boom of the hammer sent wave after wave of unexplainable pain through him. He could feel each one as painfully as the last; feel each of the numerous bones cracking under the pressure of the blows. As a scientific man, he knew just how many bones were in the human hand, and thought that must be why it was so painful. It felt as though every last one of them was breaking with mind splitting ferocity.

“Maybe he’s telling the truth,” the younger man muttered in a shaky voice as Walters collapsed in a heap on the floor, “if the building has locked down-“

“He isn’t,” the largest said harshly, “don’t question my information you little piss ant.”
He paced once in the room huffing, thinking what to do next, “go get one of the kids,” he commanded of the young guy, “we’ll see if he doesn’t mind their hands breaking.”

“Luis, reactivate the elevators, Jacobs coming up,” the man said into a walkie-talkie clipped to his shoulder.

“It will take a few minutes,” a scratchy voice replied.

“Get started then,” the man said, sounding irritated.

Walters gasped for air, his faced pressed against the cold floor, clutching his mangled hand. He had thought they were going to get one of the other scientists, make them crack. Isn’t that what he had claimed he would do? Where were the others?

2:27:19 P.M. Biozyme Industries

Tom’s eyes stared around at the crowd of scared looking scientists huddled in the main room of the locked wing. Tenril 662, the yeerk in Tom’s head, thought about what his success would mean. In twenty-four hours, he would be a sub-visser, on his way off this rock, if everything went right.

“How many do we have?” he asked a balding, yet heavyset man in a suit.

“All of them,” he smiled, “I asked all pertinent personnel to the labs before the lockdown occurred.”

“You are sure there is no way we can be disrupted?” Tom asked him.

“Positive, our security system locks down this entire wing in the event of a threat,” he relished, “and it is powered internally; even the cops won’t be able to shut it down for at least an hour. The so called terrorist raid did exactly what it was supposed to; the building is ours for the next several hours.”

“That will be plenty of time,” Tom smiled. If he was right then the first stage was all but accomplished.

“What about Walters?” the man asked, “he could be a problem if we can’t turn him immediately.”

“Our friends will take care of him,” Tom said, emphasizing the word friends with some contempt. They were the one wild card in the plan, the one thing that could upturn everything he was owed, “let’s begin.”

Tom nodded toward the other members of the sharing that had accompanied him on the “fieldtrip”, and they all began to pull something out of their pocket. The large group of scientists were paying little attention to a group of kids, they were instead talking amongst themselves, wondering what the threat might be, wondering when they would be allowed to leave. The first dracon blasts froze them all in place as half a dozen of the group collapsed onto the ground. Tom laughed to himself as he fired on another man, staring at him like a deer in the headlights. These were supposed to be the smart humans, such a pathetic race.

By the third round, with half of their numbers on the ground, the men began to scatter into adjoining rooms and some just ran for the nearest corner or desk, their most primitive instinct. With skillful precision, the remaining scientists were rounded up and blasted to the ground. None of them managed to put up any kind of defense against the attack.

<Oh my god, how could they? How could they?> Cassie cried.

<They’re yeerks,> Rachel said in disgust.

“Bring them to the portable pool, let’s get them infested as quickly as possible,” Tom said, kicking aside one of the stunned scientists to move through the room.

<They’re alive,> Cassie said, slightly relieved, but knowing that their situation was no better.

<We have to stop them, find a place to morph,> Rachel said.

<Yes, but how? We can’t just fight our way in,> Cassie said.

<The power,> Rachel realized, <Tom said the power is internal, and it’s keeping the cops out. We find a way to cut the power. Cops come in, stop the terrorists and the yeerks.>

2:34:44 P.M. Biozyme Industries

“You,” Jacob said, grabbing one of the students under the arm and dragging her to her feet.

“Jen!” her friend screamed.

“No, please, please,” the girl named Jen pled hysterically. He wanted to let her go, let her just run away. This wasn’t what he could have ever expected. Terrorizing schoolchildren? But if he didn’t take someone back to Raul, then he would be the one tortured.

“Take me,” a tall, brown haired boy said, standing up and staring seriously at Jacob. There was no doubt in his eyes.

“Sit down!” Jacob shouted, tightening his grip on the girls arm and aiming his gun at the boy. He looked around at the group, trying to look authoritative.

“Come on, you don’t want to take her,” the boy said again, a determined calm in his voice, like a hostage negotiator.

“You can’t hurt a girl dude,” a short, Hispanic boy with dark hair said, standing up next to the other boy, “who taught you this terrorist stuff, seriously.”

They were right, he didn’t want to hurt a girl, and he didn’t want to see Raul hurt this one. A kid was bad enough. He didn’t even know why he had chosen this girl. He hadn’t wanted to look any of them in the face and instead just reached out for the closest body. If these two were willing to come, maybe it was better that way.

“Okay, okay!” Jacob shouted, glancing worriedly over at the remaining members of the group, who were watching him intently as they guarded the perimeter of the kids. Would they take this as a sign of weakness on his part? Would they tell Raul? Taking a step back, “you two over here.”

“Both of us? Ugh, fine,” the shorter boy said, moving forward, and turning to his friend, “I mean, with you all the way dude.”

The other boy followed him, keeping his steady gaze carefully on Jacob. When he had moved a few feet away from the huddled mass of kids, Jacob gave Jen a little shove towards the group, “Sit. You two, let’s go.”

He led them back out of the main room to a set of elevators, and instructed them to get inside. He could have sworn they exchanged a look as they moved past him. Almost as if the short one made a motion toward the elevator that the taller shook off with the slightest movement of his head. Jacob edged in a hit the right button with his elbow, keeping his eyes on the two. He and the taller boy stared at each other, sizing the other up as the lift descended. It finally came to a stop and Jacob edged them forward with his gun, into a room just right of the elevator.

“Why did you bring two?” Raul asked as, getting up from the chair he had been waiting in.

Jacob gaped up at him, unsure of what to say, but Ramon came to his aid, “In case we lose one of them, good thinking Jacob.”

Raul considered this for a second, and then nodded his approval toward Jacob, “Go up and help guard with the others.”

Jacob gave one last look at the two boys he had condemned, before turning his back on them.

“Start with this one,” he heard Raul say, as the door swung shut.

He moved once again to the elevator, pushing the button for the lobby. As the door began to shut Jacob could hear an ear-splitting scream of pain come from the room, followed by another booming threat from Raul.

2:40:51 P.M. Hork-Bajir Colony

<Should we not wait for the others?> Ax asked Tobias nervously.

<They’re at some field trip, I don’t think they would be able to sneak off,> Tobias said, <besides, it would be better to find out what these guys are up to and then we can bring it to them when we meet at the barn.>

<Very well,> Ax said, looking apprehensively over at the small hut which held their new prisoners, <how should we proceed?>

<I’m not sure, threaten them I guess,> Tobias said uncomfortably, <I don’t suppose they trained you to do anything like this as an aristh?>

<No,> Ax responded. He was also very uncomfortable with the situation. He had been asked once before to question a yeerk by Jake, and it was a disgusting experience. He had not wished to go through it again, but it had been him who had said they had important information, and now it would have to be him who would get it.

Ax straightened up and marched toward the hut, as Tobias lifted off his perch and followed silently, gliding slowly overhead. When they reached the hut Tobias had to enter awkwardly through the door, cutting his speed and tucking his wings in. With practiced precision, he flared his wings immediately and zoomed upwards toward the roof. Ax followed through the door and gazed around the one, poorly lit room. In a far corner were two Hork-Bajir mumbling helplessly to themselves. They were tied very carefully to the wall. One of them had several vicious looking scars, which by Hork-Bajir’s healing standards, could have been only a few days old.

Lined up on the other side were the half dozen members of the guard, also tied tightly in place. To his relief, Ax found Toby standing over one of them talking in a calm but authoritative voice.

“Why were you in the forest?” Toby asked him.

“Hagrash scum!” the bound Hork-Bajir controller croaked.

“Your host will be able to tell us soon enough, yeerk,” Toby said, “if you tell us now we can end it quickly.”

“Never darkap, never fail visser,” he wheezed again.

“Like I said,” Toby continued, sounded so unlike herself, “one way or another, you will tell us.”

2:45:13 P.M. FBI Headquarters

“Sir the field team is in position but we can’t set up an entry profile until the full security specs on the Biozyme building are cleared,” Henry Franklin, one of the lead strategists, reported as Davis leaned over his desk, examining the work.

“We put in a request to Homeland a half hour ago, call them and find out what the hell is going on,” Davis said, feeling the pressure of the clock, they needed to be in that building soon. Before it was too late. “Have them set up a preliminary entry package, be ready at a seconds command. We can work up something more in depth when we get it.”
“I’ll give HS a call,” Richards offered from two stations over.

Davis nodded to him and moved across the room to another unit of computers and spoke to the two women standing over one of the stations, “Do we have a profile on these guys yet?”

“It just came through,” one of them reported, showing a screen with several pictures, “this is the one we expect to be the leader. Raul Garza. He’s a merc, but he has ties to a domestic terror group known as High Dawn.”

“Send it over to me I can run known associates,” the other woman said, sliding back into the seat by her station.

“Good,” Davis said, although this new information did not give them any real help, “find out the connection between him and Biozyme, pharmaceuticals, anything related.”

“Boss,” Richards called, rushing over to him, “just got the specs on Biozyme, we have a problem.”

“Go ahead,” said Davis, following Richards over to an empty station as he spoke.

“There’s an entire internal security network that wasn’t in the schematics. The entire building is locked down if the panic button is hit, which it looks like it has been.”

“So they’re trapped in there?”

“Right but-“

“They’re in there with the formula,” Davis finished for him, “and their mission might just be to destroy the thing. How long will it take to shut down?”

“The entire system has an internal generator so cutting the power is out. It could take us upwards of an hour to get through the firewall.”

“Damnit, okay get started on that, but we can’t rely on it, we need another way in,” Davis said. He knew they were running out of time, unless a miracle occurred they would not be getting into that building.

2:49:38 P.M. Biozyme Industries

<Are you sure this is the right way?> Cassie asked, scurrying along.

<Yea, um, pretty sure,> Rachel said doubtfully. She took another sniff with her rat nose, showing her the way, <come on Cassie, if a normal mouse can smell its way through a maze, shouldn’t we be able to?>

<Should I remind you that the only reason we have this morph is that my rat wasn’t able to get through that maze?> Cassie said, but she was beginning to sift through the scents before her now and could definitely smell something foul getting stronger.
They had morphed the rat and climbed up into the vents on the logic that the generator would be giving off some powerful smells. Like a rat following cheese through a maze, they were following the smell of oil and coolant to their prize.

As they reached another junction, the smell grew even stronger as a breeze of hot air blew towards them, <Oh yea, definitely this way.>

The smell began to become even more prominent to their tiny but powerful rat noses. There was no longer a need to sort through a dozen different odors; it was the only smell. Rachel was beginning to feel light headed in the back of the rat’s brain, which was telling her to turn around, sensing danger in the smell. Yet they continued to power forward, moving faster now that the smell had become nearly unbearable. Finally, they reached a large grate exploding with heat. They had undoubtedly located the generator, just on the other side of the grate.

<How do we get through?> Rachel asked, eyeing the tiny slits in the grate with blurry rat vision.

<Oh come on Rachel, you really need to watch animal planet more,> Cassie said, moving forward confidently, <rats can flatten their bodies to squeeze under nearly any crack.>

<You really need to stop watching animal planet,> Rachel said, watching Cassie’s rat body squeeze unnaturally through the hole, <that is gross.>

Trusting her best friend’s knowledge of animals could never be wrong, and hoping that the rats instincts would help guide her through, Rachel forced her way into the crack. She could not have been prepared for how painful it would be. Although she couldn’t think of how it shouldn’t be, but so used to her bones shifting using painless alien technology, she had allowed herself to forget just how painful it should be. As she managed to squeeze about half of her tiny body through the grate, she saw Cassie clear it and tumble to the floor.

MOTION SENSOR ACTIVATED. INTRUDER DETECTED. SECURITY MEASURES ACTIVATED.

A loud robotic voice boomed throughout the room seconds after Cassie had hit the floor.

<Oh no!> Cassie said, already beginning to demorph.

<Not good, we should wooooaaah,> Rachel began as she freed herself and tumbled to the ground, <that was fun, so what are these security meas->

<Rachel, demorph fast!> Cassie shouted, already almost half human, <its pumping gas into the room!>

Rachel began growing as fast as she could, the fur melting away to reveal smooth skin as blonde hair sprouted from the top of the rats head. But it wasn’t happening fast enough. The gas was designed to knock a human out within minutes; it would kill a rat in much less time. Rachel was beginning to lose focus, the blurry pictures in front of her becoming fragmented and distant.

“Rachel, come on! You can do it!” Cassie shouted, fully human now but still changing. She knew maybe the only way to save her friend was to do what they had come to do, and quickly. Quick destruction meant channeling some of Rachel’s power, which was why white fur spread across Cassie’s entire body. She too was beginning to feel the effects of the gas, but the morphing seemed to be temporarily washing away the effects. She was getting bigger, more powerful, less easily knocked out by a simple gas, but she was not becoming invulnerable to it.

She looked down as the muscles began to spread across her body, rippling over her old, puny muscles; doubling, tripling. On the ground was Rachel, sprawled out, immobile, but human. Wasting no time, Cassie reared up on her hind legs and began striking the large engine with all the might her polar bear morph possessed. It would not yield to a single hit, but a few dozen, maybe. BAM BAM BAM, she pounded away at the metal, causing large meaningless dents in it. BAM BAM BAM, she thought of Rachel, and knew she had only minutes left. BAM BAM BAM.

2:55:37 P.M. Biozyme Industries

“That’s enough,” Raul raged, standing up straight again. His hands and face were covered in blood. Jake’s blood, Marco’s blood, Dr. Walters blood; it was impossible to tell. He had gone crazy with rage, pounding senselessly on the three of them, desperate for answers that they could not give.

“Please,” Walters said with difficulty, spitting up blood with every word, “I have nothing, I can tell you nothing.”

“You WILL tell us!” Raul screamed, “You will tell us! Or HE will die!”

Raul grabbed Marco by the collar and with one hand threw him a few feet across the room. He crumpled in a pile on the floor next to the other man.

“Ramon, be prepared to kill him in…five seconds,” Raul said, not taking his eyes off Walters, who was looking imploringly from Marco to Jake to Ramon, seemingly unable to look Raul in the eyes.

Jake knew it was time for drastic action. He could tell almost immediately after being brought into the room. He didn’t need what must have been a half hour of beating to tell him that Walters didn’t have the information that they needed. Maybe Raul knew it too, maybe he was just crazy, maybe desperation had made him snap. The only thing Jake knew was that unless he took action now, they would kill Marco.

“Four…”

From his position on the ground, Jake tested his weight in the crouched position. He would not be able to do much. He had a few cracked ribs for sure; some broken fingers and his eyes were nearly swollen shut.

“Three…”

Staring ahead at his target, he saw Marco propped up underneath him. He was in even worse shape. One leg was broken, as well as an arm, and his face looked like an abstract painting. That Jake was able to register the signal in Marco’s mangled face was a testament to the length of their friendship. The slight shake of his head and a motion over to Raul was unmistakable to Jake.

“Two…” Raul stretched out the number as long as he could, staring daggers at Walters.

Seizing the opportunity, Jake sprung to his feet, ignoring the pain as his body screamed its disapproval. He charged straight for Raul, cutting the distance in half before even catching his attention. But now he was ready, the surprise was over, the attack would not work. Raul grinned as he threw his hands out to throw Jake back to the ground.

Suddenly, the entire room went black. Unable to see, but driven by his momentum, Jake plowed into a suddenly surprised body, sending them both into the wall. He and Raul rolled around the ground, confused and frantic, landing and missing punches sporadically. From across the room Jake could hear another struggle as Marco seemed to be trying to throw his captors hold.

Just as suddenly as the darkness, was the shocking BAM BAM of gunfire. The muzzle blasts shot light across the room but only briefly. Not enough to see what was happened, not enough to see where the two shots had ended up.

2:59:27 P.M. FBI Headquarters

Davis walked down a deserted hallway, away from the hectic energy of the bullpen. It had been a busy hour for him, going non-stop to end this attack and to lead his team. He had not had a moment to himself, which for him in particular could become very problematic. It was highly important that he keep regular updates, especially today. He pulled out his cell phone and hit the speed dial, looking over his shoulder to be sure he had moved far enough away from anyone who might overhear him. The call was answered on the second ring.

“This is Gamad Four-Two-Seven,” he said into the phone, “I’m sorry I haven’t reported in sooner.”

3:00:00 P.M.

Well there it is! I hope you liked it! To be honest I thought this chapter was a little boring. (just wait until we get a little later, ho ho) But I hope you guys liked it all the same, and I hope I’ve managed to keep it exciting.
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Awesome job, Duff! Will be eagerly holding my breath until the next chapter^^

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