Hey, I definitely liked your fic. Had to sign up for an account just to continue reading it. I especially like how you set up Mike as a classic case of Mary Sue, but then break it down by having him fail to save Tobias. There are still some minor problems in it, but they can easily be chalked up to Mike not being as good at this as he thinks he is, for example, why didn't he think to grab the blue box from Elfangor so as to avoid the whole ordeal with David, and to be able to make more animorphs as needed, as he would know that Melissa would actually make a good member of the team based off of the Megamorphs book.
It's been a while since I have read book 5, but it probably is worth at least a chapter at the end of your book 4 fic, perhaps Mike suggesting something other than ant morphs, and it going smoothly.
Thanks man, always nice to get new comments! +1
lol, I actually didn't even know what a Mary Sue was when I first started the fic, I just spent too much time day dreaming about being an Animorph (I was only 13 at the time). I never intended for Mike to be perfect though, that's why I had him make mistakes, he's only human after all.
Not picking up the blue box from the construction site was deliberate, as I have yet to decide if I'm going to write the David Saga. I would like to, but Mike isn't stupid enough to forget a major event like that, so I'd need a good reason for why he doesn't do it, or why he might be unable to find the cube.
Thanks for the suggestion regarding book 5, I was actually considering adding a chapter at the end of 4 just to show Marco's reactions from an alternate view point. You make a good point about the Ant thing though, no idea what Mike could do there. The problem is that I want some of the bad stuff to still happen to add drama, but I don't want Mike to constantly fail or look like an idiot either, that's almost as bad as making him look perfect!
If you have any other comments or suggestions, feel free to PM me or post here again.