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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #60 on: August 19, 2009, 12:56:10 PM »
Oh, do you want me to put you in this too, TTH? 
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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #61 on: August 20, 2009, 01:54:54 AM »
Oh, do you want me to put you in this too, TTH? 

Only if I am clueless as to what is going on! Haha
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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #62 on: August 20, 2009, 02:32:25 PM »
Alright, I'll put you in as coming back from a vacation in The Lands Beyond.  Sorry I'm taking so long to post the next chapter, just life catching up to me.
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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #63 on: August 20, 2009, 02:34:54 PM »
Take your time, but hurry up.

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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #64 on: August 20, 2009, 04:00:26 PM »
Well, good for you, because here's chapter seven!  Including another bad guy.  I didn't put you, TTH, in this one, but you'll be in the next one.

Chapter Seven

   "Wait...I think he's waking up.  Cloaky?  CloakedFigure, can you here me?"
   "Cloaky!  I swear, he moved...is he alright?  Is he like, in a coma or something?"
   "Ummmm...Earth to Cloaky?  Wait!  No...yeah, I think he's awake!"
   "No...wait, you're right!  Cloaky!  Wake up!  Say something!  Moan!"
   Cloaky chose the last option and moaned.  Blinking awake, he looked to his right and saw Mr. Guy closest to him, Gaz beyond him, and just behind Gaz, Blocky.  They were all looking anxiously at him.  With a jolt of panic, Cloaky realized that his hood was down, revealing his feline form, somewhat like a tiger.  It should be incinerating everything around him, but nothing was happening.  He glanced down at the arrow in his cloak.  Was that it?  Cloaky tried to lift his hand to take it out and found he couldn't.  Mr. Guy, observing his attempts to pull his hand up, shook his head.
   "She has telekeniesis powers.  Chained us down.  I think the arrows have something on them that stop us from using our powers.  Just recently, Queen informed us that she was going to take her first attempt to take RAF.  She said she was going to attack today."
   "Oh no!" said Cloaky. "We have to get back there and help them!"

   HiImshort crouched behind the wall, listening to the barrage of Dracon and Shredder fire pound against the wall.  Short, who was Mewtwo, created a ball of energy.  The other RAFians were popping up, quickly firing, then ducking back down again.  Being Mewtwo, even though he had a limit to his powers, he peered through the wall and found his target, then jumped up, flung it, and ducked down again.  A cry of pain rewarded him.  Ubaki, who fired off a few shots next to him, turned to Short.
   "Pardon me for being non-original, but there are far to many of them.  How can we win?"  
   "We've gotta keep fighting," said Short.  "We can't let these guys overrun RAF.  Where will we be then?"
   ThinkAgain, who was on the opposite side of Short, fired off a shot, then let out a yell of pain and fell to the ground.  Ubaki and Short rushed over to him.  There was a sizzling dracon wound in his arm.  Think was very shaky, but still concious.  "I'm...I'm alright," he said, turning very pale as he tried to stand up.  He just then remained in a crouch.  "I'll be fine, really..." he said, looking at Ubaki and Short, who were eyeing him disbelievingly.
   Short shook his head. "OK, but be careful."  He then shot off another energy ball.

   A little while later, Faerie came flying up to Ubaki, Short, and Think.  "Horse is just about to loose a huge wave, and as soon as she does, shoot a bunch of times as they're knocked down."  
   "Ok," said Ubaki.  Faerie flew off again, telling the other people the news.  A little while later, Horsie let loose a huge wave, and massive confusion ensued.  There was water sloshing everywhere, shot's being fired, yells of pain and confusion, Richard shouting orders, Queen shouting orders, and a general hullaballo.
   When the confusion had subsided some, there were a lot of the banned's army lying on the ground, some unconcious, and one or two shot too many times, dead.  But, there was a problem.  Horsie had used the confusion, along with Stalker, to slip down from the wall.  They were currently charging across the ground towards Queen, intent on getting back Mr. Guy, Blocky, Gaz, and Cloaky.  Este acted fast, zooming down from the wall and landing in front of them.  "Get back!" she yelled. "Get back, or you're going to get killed!  What good will that do to Guy and Gaz and Blocky and Cloaky?"
   Knowing that they were beaten, the pair angrily crossed back into the wall, Gaz stunning someone trying to enter with them.  Este dodged several Dracon beams coming from the bushes, then zoomed back up and over the wall.
   Richard stood up again.  "You're beaten, Queen." He called.  "You can't win, and you know it.  Leave now, or we will kill you.  And that's a promise."
   Queen pushed her way out of the bushes, and strangely, smiled up at Richard.  "You really think we were beaten that easily?  We're leaving because we got back some of the cards, and I want to keep it that way.  It's like a game, Richard.  I hold some cards, and you hold more.  But, I just took one of your cards.  Yorick?"
   Yorick came from the bushes, distainfully dragging something.  He dumped it on the ground, smirked, said "Oops.  I dropped him." Then held it up.  TobSie, also known as Nomad, gave a little gasp and tried to raise the Shredder beam in her hand, but Richard gently pushed it back down and said "We'll get him back.  I promise, TobSie."
   TobSie's RAFboy, Duff, was slumped in Yorick's arms, an arrow sticking out of his shoulder.

   Mr. Guy struggled vainly against the invisible bonds on his hands in feet. Have to get back...have to help them...have to help Horsie! His thoughts pounded against his head and he pulled and twisted, but to no use.  His knowledge of computers and just plain knowledge wouldn't help him here.  A day or so after his capture, Aloth had come in with three arrows, which he stuck into each of them, making sure, that if they had powers, they wouldn't use them.  It was pointless...at least until Cloaky came along.  They just left the arrow in him, though.  
   Cloaky, next to Guy, was attempting to pull out his arrow with his teeth.  His attempts so far had only left him with mouthfuls of the feather fletching, which he spent a while trying to spit them out again.  The Realm Walker reached down as far as he could, but began spitting out the feathers again.
   Gaz was just sitting and thinking, trying to think of a way out of here, or some plan to get Yorick or Aloth, or most prefered, Queen.
   Blocky was exerting his dragon stregnth against the bonds, and was having the most luck so far.  He could move his hands about and inch.
   Aloth was the first to return.  He glanced fearfully over his shoulder, then wormed his way into the door cut in the wall across from the prisoners.  
   Yorick strode in next.  Guy's heart plummeted as he saw Duff being roughly dragged across the ground.  Duff's face was all scratched up, probably from being dragged across the rocky ground.  Guy realized that they all probably looked like that.  The others did, and his face sorta stung.  He was so used to it by now, he didn't realized.  Yorick dumped Duff on the other side of Cloaky, and slowly backed away.
   Then Queen came in.  Her face was a mask of fury, and all her movements gave away that she was really furious.  She flicked her hand, and Duff was arranged in the same position as the rest of them, then his hands and feet stuck to the floor.  She whipped around and turned to Yorick.  "We had them.  We had them, and if it wasn't for that blasted little seal, we would have won.  How many times have I told you to get her?  How many?!"
   Yorick flinched, then said. "I've tried Queen, and I'll only gun for her now, but I need--no, I would like you to come with so that you pull them over the wall when I shoot them.  You're so powerful, you can get them from afar.  Also, I have very good news.  We have someone who is willing to join RAF, and spy on them, and tell us their plans.  She bears a grudge against a certain RAFian, and she is willing to get all of them.  However, she wants part of our power."
   Queen shook her head. "When we win, we'll just kill her.  That's excellent news!  When can I meet her?"
   "Right now," a voice said from the cave entrance, and a cloaked person came in.  Guy rapidly cast a glance over to Cloaky.  The Realm Walker was stiff with shock, and let out a little gasp.  Mr. Guy turned his attention back to the newcomer, who walked over to Cloaky.  
   "You didn't tell me you had captured him, Yorick!" She exclaimed.  Yorick looked confused as the spy stood back up and walked back over to them.  "This is the RAFian I bear a grudge against!  Hahahaha!  It enlightens me to see you've already got him.  But, you still need my services, I guess?"
   Queen strode up to her.  "My name is AlmightyQueen.  Who are you?"
   Cloaky interuppted them, his voice cold with dislike.  "Her name is Dagger.  What are you doing here, Dagger?  Can't you just kill me now and be happy with that as I lie helpless at your feet?"
   Dagger tipped her head to one side.  "Cloaky's hood is down, yet the ones next to him are alive.  How?"
   Aloth came from the hole, holding an arrow.  "This, miss." he said. "A special chemical on it shuts down powers."
   "Excellent," said Dagger, who deftly snapped the arrow so that only a small part of the shaft was left near the tip.  She stuck it into her cloak, where it was very nearly invisible, only the ones that saw it put in would probably find it.  She then pulled down her hood, reavealing a reptilian snake-like creature, like Cloaky was a feline creature.
   "My name is Dagger," she said. "And I'm, well, I suppose Cloaky's evil sister."
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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #65 on: August 20, 2009, 04:13:31 PM »
lol I get it! Cloak and Dagger! Nice wave Horsie, your control over water could just as well be as good as mine
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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #66 on: August 20, 2009, 04:25:49 PM »
Thanks, Blue!  I'll make sure to include your powers in the next chapter.

Actually, Cloaky was the one who informed me that Dagger was his Realm Walker evil sister, in Introduction Randomness.  I saw fitting that she should be in it.
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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #67 on: August 20, 2009, 04:29:43 PM »
Awesome chapter, Horse!  Very epic battle scene.

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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #68 on: August 20, 2009, 04:39:51 PM »
I've been Ty Leed!   ;)

Apparently, Dagger has now become my archenemy nemesis.  I like.


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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #69 on: August 20, 2009, 04:58:30 PM »
Love the new part!

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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #70 on: August 20, 2009, 07:45:58 PM »
OK, off the top of my head, next chapter will be starring Tobiasthehawk, The Frozen Angry Zombie, and Blue's ice ninja powers.  :P

I haven't started writing yet, just making a plan.
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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #71 on: August 20, 2009, 10:44:51 PM »
I love this story, so awesome

Keep it up!  :thumbsup:

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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #72 on: August 20, 2009, 11:41:43 PM »
Just thought of something.  If your plot-line should need someone to be critically injured from the fighting (to add more drama or some-such; not that your story really needs any more drama, though), feel free to use me, since I would have provided the biggest target for dracon beams during the battle.

I'm not trying to tell you how to write your story, just, yanno, throwing that out there.  You know, just FYI in case you would have otherwise been reluctant to be that merciless to my character.  >:D

Anyway, I'm sure it will be great, whatever you do.  Can't wait to see what happens next!

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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #73 on: August 21, 2009, 11:38:52 AM »
Awesome chapter Seal! :thumbsup:

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Re: Revenge of the Banned
« Reply #74 on: August 21, 2009, 12:09:27 PM »
Nooo! Why do they keep stopping us?! WHY!?!
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