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Offline Toominator Z

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Original Song: "Too Long"
« on: August 04, 2010, 07:04:33 AM »
Update
New link doesn't require download. Keeping up the download link in case anyone wants it. And thanks, Esty.

http://www.letsbeef.com/forums/proddetail.php?prod=56993-2-672

Collaboration by two of my crew members and myself. Lethal made the beat and the first verse, I'm on the second verse, Doc T on the last. Feedback is appreciated.

http://www.sendspace.com/file/ierqwd
« Last Edit: August 07, 2010, 09:00:11 AM by DBZ »

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Re: Original Song: "Too Long"
« Reply #1 on: August 04, 2010, 12:16:33 PM »
Feedback:

1. This is fexcellent. *high fives*
2. Lethal can afford to add a little gentle bassline without messing up the feel overall.
3. Cut back on some of the echo, and it will be easier to enjoy as a whole.
4. Toomin, enunciate a bit more sharply, please. There were a few tiny moments that were hard to understand. Your timing is perfect, however.
5. The other way around for Doc T; fix the timing, but great clarity for each word.
6. The laugh at the end made me giggle. :) I like it.


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