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The secret life of the American superhero
« on: May 10, 2013, 09:33:25 AM »
Just throwing this out there. I've had a few characters and ideas bouncing around in my head. Why knows, maybe I can have the first original character fan fiction turned into a comic book. Is it fan fiction if it's an original character?
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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #1 on: May 10, 2013, 09:43:19 AM »
Nice opening. And your question confused me now :P

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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #2 on: May 10, 2013, 03:00:22 PM »
I guess you can say its fan fiction. It starts good.
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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #3 on: May 11, 2013, 09:23:32 AM »
Nice intro... and yes.... It is still considered fanfiction if you base it on a story that's already been written. Trust me, I've seen plenty like that... But, still, good intro... :)
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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #4 on: May 11, 2013, 05:04:04 PM »
I'll have something out later today. For the past two fays I've been booked schedule wise.
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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #5 on: May 13, 2013, 08:52:28 AM »
My name is Ryan Shang. I am a seventeen year senior at Great Oak High School, in Aberdeen Washington. It's a mid sized town, with a population of sixteen thousand according to the census. The biggest claim to faim is that two members of the 90's grunge band Nirvana were born here. Coming in at a very close second is being the hometown of WWE wrestler Daniel Bryan. It wouldn't be so bad if the biggest high school in town hadn't decided to model the school mascot after Mr Bryan. I find pep rallies have the opposite of the intended affect when you try to force people to get excited without giving them any particular reason to. And having a giant disproportionate man with a neck beard and skin tight shorts attending somehow turns a depressing event into a tragic comedy of sorts.

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I'm probably setting a bad first impression. Honestly most of the time I have a very cherub-like demeanor. As of late though, the whole puberty thing is finally catching up. I want from short and fat to a skinny lamp post in a manner of two months and gained the ability to read minds practicaly over night. Hmm? You're more curious about the mind reading? Fine. It started when I was about 15. When I got pissed off, at my parents, at my friends, at my **** neighbors dog, one thing or another just...flew right at them. It was strange, but I didn't put much thought into it until my dad threw out his back when a garden gnome smashed into him.

After that happened I got freaked out. After all, I don't want, nor will I ever want to hurt anyone. I'm a pacifist by design. Eventually general panic led to paranoia. Then after that, straight depression. And, apparently I was lot atupider when I was 15, because I decided to actually try my hand at being a superhero. It went as well as you would expect, meaning that I had one really crappy night of riding around the business district on a ten speed bike looking for crime. The affair ended on a high note when I actually FOUND some crime, and ran the hell away because what am I supposed to do? I'm a teenager who can read peoples minds and mess up your furniture by thinking at it really hard. I'm trying to put the whole thing behind me at this point. Live and learn I guess.
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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #6 on: May 13, 2013, 08:59:11 PM »
Reminds me of the comic book series Invincible.
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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #7 on: May 19, 2013, 09:32:25 PM »
In my experience God, the Universe, fate, whatever  you choose to believe in, has a very grim determination to drive you towards what it wants now matter how much you may protest along the way. People born strong become athletes. People who like Star Trek start software companies. And people with super powers become heroes.

Super powers wouldn't be called a rare thing in this day and age, even though they've estimated the odds of having them are literally one in a million. I don't even think I'm the only guy with powers in town, an 8th grader named Bryce Lynn has been near enough fires to rule out coincidence. Nothing I can say for certain, but I am dead sure I'm superhuman. I've been doing a lot of thinking like this lately. Deep thinking. Questioning why, and how. Maybe the deep thinking is what motivated me to take up crime fighting again. Maybe it's why I'm currently being shot at.

BANG! BANG!

I'm sure you've heard this a million times before, but gunshots aren't quiet. The sound of gun powder exploding hard enough to send a piece of metal faster than the speed of sound is beyond belief. And it's currently filling my ears.

Actively trying to be a hero seems to be what's screwing me up. If I had been walking by, and through sheer coincidence saw this convenience store being robbed, everything would have gone a lot more smoothly. But alas, I'm currently crouching for cover behind a chip rack.  I think too much in high stakes situations.

BANG!

"Get out of there kid! Or I'll s-" The mans threats were cut off quite suddenly. Choked on his own spit hopefuly? But no, it appears the five foot seven middle eastern cashier is more competent than me, as she currently has this dangerous armed criminal in a headlock. All I could do was sigh, and mentally pull the gun out of his hand.
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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #8 on: May 19, 2013, 09:47:19 PM »
Telekinesis is such a cool power.
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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #9 on: May 19, 2013, 09:50:51 PM »
Telekinesis. You can either be a hero with it or the world's greatest petty thief. Take your pick. :P

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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #10 on: May 20, 2013, 08:29:02 AM »
Yep. :) Haha.
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« Reply #11 on: July 10, 2013, 11:03:16 PM »
As I made my exit, I briefly considered leaping through the store's display window. I ruled this out when I remembered how much it cost to replay a window. So I ran out the automatic doors in the most heroic fashion a teenager in baggy jeans and a superman sweat shirt can manage. My bike flew to me and I booked it out of there. The stores alarm began behind me and I heard sirens in  the distance as I rode out. That could have gone better. Every freaking time I try to do some good for the world, the world politely says no with a good old fashioned reality check. It's frustrating beyond belief. Probably awful for my own self esteem to, as I was considering the pros and cons of becoming a telekinetic hermit. Nah I pondered I couldn't live without the freedom to visit a taco truck at will.

What exactly spiked this sudden need to go Batmaning? Well I got a copy of Watchmen. Watchmen, the revolutionary graphic novel, so revolutionary and influential that it currently sits at #90 of Time magazines top 100 novels since 1923. Considered to be the most mature and complex story ever written in a graphic novel, the story of a group of heroes trying to deal with the corruption that limits both them and society as a whole. Pretty inspiring s*** it what I'm saying. Even thinking about was bringing my mood up. A better mood led to clearer thinking, as I cruised past the playground, I began to think of how I might actually improve. Super powers do not make a superhero. I was built like a stick man, couldn't fight my way out of a wet paper bag, and had all the courage and motivation of an obese squirrel. So at best I could be an intern for the Justice League. I needed to improve my body and my mental state. So I texted my parents to give myself enough time for a ten mile bike ride. Then stopped at mile 3 for a breather and a bottle of snapple. I was seriously pathetic. So I made my way home, ordered a workout DVD, threw all the cheese puffs we had in the garbage, and got to work.
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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #12 on: July 11, 2013, 12:29:38 AM »
You have a seriously humorous (or is it humorously serious?) style of writing.

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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #13 on: July 11, 2013, 01:07:37 AM »
I attempt to simultaneously emulate Douglas Adams (Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy) and Yatzee Croshaw (Web series Zero Punctuation, books: Mogworld)

Both have an element I refer to as a British wit. Subtle humor, good quips, fast metaphors. Telling a sensible yet hilarious story.

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Re: The secret life of the American superhero
« Reply #14 on: July 11, 2013, 10:11:52 AM »
That's funny stuff right there.
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« Reply #15 on: July 11, 2013, 12:51:57 PM »
Lol, you do a great job, if Yatzee/Adams is what you're going for.  I can almost automatically hear your chapters being read in Yatzee's voice, that's how close the humor style is.  Had me laughing out (very) loud a couple times at that last chapter.  All the motivation and courage of an obese squirrel, yep, I know the feeling, lol.

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« Reply #16 on: July 21, 2013, 12:00:39 AM »
 Great Oak High is almost stereotypical in just how pretentious everyone is. It follows the perfect Hollywood design. You have popular kids, known for either a trophy they earned or the wild parties they throw. There are the mid level normals who keep their heads down and hand in pockets for fear of actually being noticed. The bottom of the chain is where freaks geeks and outcasts lie. The least organized, most fun social clique you can be in. Say what you will about nerds and social outcasts, but band camp is where one truly becomes a man.

 In the great pyramid that is high school I am the speaking voice of the marching band. The kind of guy who can get an entire brass section into one spot with a single group text. The power is tempting, but I try to control myself when I can. My best friend is a Mr. Mark Lincoln, the man single handedly responsible for the yearly Shakespeare in the Park play. The boy who has been by my side every second of awkward that is my life. The only person on this planet who knows about my powers.

"So" snicker "Tell me this again" He said in a laughing fit. "You tried to stop a robbery?" I was really getting pissed at him. Especially since he was still in Macbeth costume. Tights are irritating. I sighed. "Yep. I tried to use my mother****ing superhuman powers  to do a little bit of good, and was outdone by an overweight cashier. Are we going to move past this now?" He was still laughing when he said "Not until I get that scene tattooed across my eyelids so that I will remember this every time I wake up." So I punched him in the arm. "Let's go for a burger. Rare Beef sounds good."
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« Reply #17 on: July 21, 2013, 08:24:46 PM »
Wow. Sounds like something my bff's IRL would do.
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« Reply #18 on: August 23, 2013, 12:13:33 AM »
 Rare Beef is the closest we have to a teen hangout. It's a food truck that serves hamburgers a block away from central park. Good burgers to, the best imitation angus beef you can get, cooked to perfection and smothered in what the owner calls "nasty sauce." Get a Rare Burger with a side of onion rings and their locally famous shakes, and you have yourself a delicious lunch and a clogged artery. The perfect thing for when your metabolism converts grease to pimples instead of fat.

 Mark and I chose our usual spot, a park bench with a great view of the skate park and the girls cross country practice. We started with the usual pointless chatter of local gossip, video games, and exchanged insults before the conversation took it's usual turn to the subject of my powers. "So," He said before filling his mouth beyond maximum capacity, yet still pronouncing every word like a practiced linguistic professor. "What are your plans?" I knew what he was talking about. "Plans for what Mark?" Barely a question. "I mean what do you want to do with the fact that you have abilities most people can barely dream of." Well that was a statement that took some thought. "I honestly don't know. I mean, for a while I've been hoping the plan wouldn't change. Work through high school, get a Masters in engineering, go into IT at a starting salary of fifty thousand a year, meet a women, get married, have three beautiful blonde children, and have my brain transferred into a robot body."

 He gave me a look. "We really need to update your life plan. When did you come up with that?" I swallowed a bite of onion ring. "Fourth grade, one of my more insightful periods I think." All he could do was shake his head. "Man, you lack vision. You could do something really big. Something that would get you remembered." "Or killed." I muttered. "Every hero has to take a risk. What if I'm the one that doesn't make it. The cautionary tales for flying babies and toddlers that spit fire. 'Don't step in front of death lasers Ryan Shang, nothing left of him but a pile of ash." My response actually seemed to be getting him angry. "Can't you think about anything but your own butt? There are people that need help. Superpowered criminals tend to skew the murder rate pretty well Ryan. I mean it's not like you need to start big. Do some local heroism. Build your name up."

Just then a bus full of schoolchildren careened past me towards a populated part of the park.   
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« Reply #19 on: August 23, 2013, 01:31:55 AM »
This is great. Thanks for the update!