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[AniDragon]

There was another Pemalite Chronicles on Old!RAF, so you could be thinking of the other one. Mine's currently unfinished. It's on, like, the last page.

[Duff]

yea i hunted it down and no it wasnt the one i was thinking of lol sorry, but i will def read it when i get the chance, which will hopefully be tomorrow

[morfowt]

Mike:




















































THANK GOD YOU FINALLY UPDATED!!!

lol

like it, although I am surprised tobias wasn't a hawk when jake arrived. I wonder what happened that caused that...

[Phoenix004]

Heh, glad you liked it. Part of the reason it took longer than expected was because I've been taking apart the old chapters, editing in new parts and deleting the crap stuff. It probably takes longer than writing a chapter from scratch! 

[morfowt]

really? I imagined it'd be easier. could create more mistakes, but easier. oh well that's just me.

[Qwerty the Charliecorn]

THANK YOU!!! 

It's about time you updated. Not to rush you, of course. A long-awaited chapter is better than a crappy and poorly written one.

GAH! Cliffhanger.  This is starting to pick up again. I'm really excited to find out what happens. Wondering if Mike will make a mistake, screw everything up, and end up getting everyone in serious trouble. Not that it would be a bad thing if he did. 

Spelling and grammar are good, as far as I can see. Then again, I sort of skimmed over the whole thing. You probably didn't ask to have the chapter dissected, though.

Anyway, great work again. I'll be watching for the next chapter, whenever it comes out.

[Phoenix004]

If you want to dissect it then I don't mind. Criticism is fine as long as it's constructive and not just mindless flaming. Feel free to point out any dumb mistakes though, as I can correct those!

For those of you who read the original version, we are finally approaching brand new territory. The next chapter might not contain anything new, but the one after it definitely will. And remember, the outcome might be different this time...

[Nateosaurus]

Nice chapter mike, I can't wait to see what happens next!

Ah I saw one spelling mistake? I think so anyways, sceptical, I thought it was skeptical? But anyways I have no idea..

[morfowt]

oooh quick update. nice.

well that wasn't unexected, erika being a controller I mean. although a voluntary one, that was unexpected...

not that it matters, but the bold words are actually done in italic in the books.

anyway, keep it up.

[Hunter]

OMFG!!! i love the update mike! plz keep it comin'!

[Animorphsjake]

um..just to say since I quit RAF I wont be updating my fan fics anymore so um anyone can update em if they want

[Nateosaurus]

Excellent chapter Mike. Great fight scene!

[morfowt]

uh...erika's yeerk was currently in the pool. remember erika was in the voluntary controller area (with the sofas and tv).

[Nateosaurus]

uh...erika's yeerk was currently in the pool. remember erika was in the voluntary controller area (with the sofas and tv).

right, of course. i edited my original post

[Phoenix004]

Thanks guys! Glad you like it! I'm definitely considering writing more of Mike's adventures now! 

I'm doing pretty well on my next chapter, but I'm going to try and space out my posting a little so that I don't post everything too quickly. I'll probably post this chapter once I've written some of the next one. Shouldn't be too long hopefully!