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line test
« on: June 07, 2008, 03:41:55 AM »
Ok, here, you can post test lines, and others will give you feedback on it. Sounds simple enough?

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Re: line test
« Reply #1 on: June 08, 2008, 06:54:12 PM »
might as well use this. otherwise it's pointless

here's the lines I do for david in his first chapter.
http://www.mediafire.com/?zk1hjne21iy

obviously there's room for improvement. I want to know what you think and where I can improve.

Note: there aren't any for this segment, but you'll find that I do not do David's yelling very well.

Edit: here's my first thought-speak. I think it might be different from the thought-speak u guys are already using...
http://www.mediafire.com/?5qbid0tgcb3

This one there's yelling, and as you can see, I'm not very good at yelling.
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Re: line test
« Reply #2 on: June 09, 2008, 09:27:09 AM »
Please don't take this badly morf, but I don't think your voice is right for David. From the start he was a bit more... abrasive for lack of a better term. You sound good for general voice acting though, just not someone as dark as David.

This is just my opinion of course.

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Re: line test
« Reply #3 on: June 09, 2008, 09:30:20 AM »
can't really take that badly if I don't even know the meaning of the word abrasive...

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Re: line test
« Reply #4 on: June 09, 2008, 09:42:11 AM »
A bit more of an edge. Actually sadistic is a better word for it, kinda on the mean side.


Edit: Here's an example Jax did. http://www.mediafire.com/?o8m1udxtgnc
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Re: line test
« Reply #5 on: June 09, 2008, 01:45:35 PM »
That's what that was for?

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Re: line test
« Reply #6 on: June 09, 2008, 03:25:44 PM »
heh, i tried a david just for the fun of it
http://www.mediafire.com/?yzsbjnpgvsi
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Re: line test
« Reply #7 on: June 09, 2008, 05:40:01 PM »
jayne, I couldn't hear anything you said. and I turned up the volume of everything to the max.

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Re: line test
« Reply #8 on: June 09, 2008, 05:50:29 PM »
ahem, i'll try it here in the right place

i found a mic and tried tobias, here you go. its really quiet, sorry
http://www.mediafire.com/?blniyejltt1
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Re: line test
« Reply #9 on: June 09, 2008, 06:26:14 PM »
Yeah, I couldn't hear it at all. :(

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Re: line test
« Reply #10 on: June 09, 2008, 06:35:20 PM »
Here, I redid it, its louder, and probably better than my first one
http://www.mediafire.com/?jmxcmz05ji0
« Last Edit: June 09, 2008, 06:42:04 PM by Shanker »
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« Reply #11 on: June 09, 2008, 06:44:38 PM »
Awesome.

Also, I know I'm getting a bit ahead, but I decided to start recording my lines for Loren. I have the first run through of the first chapter done. There's a few things I want to fix, but I want your opinions first. Here you go:

http://www.mediafire.com/?vn7o3nndgtn

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Re: line test
« Reply #12 on: June 09, 2008, 06:47:13 PM »
so was it any good? sound at all like tobias? any tips on sounding more emo? cuz im really not emo
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Re: line test
« Reply #13 on: June 09, 2008, 06:59:23 PM »
Oh, sorry. I didn't see that you had posted the new link. Dur.

::runs off to download land:: Gosh I wish these downloaded quicker...blah....


You sound really good actually! Yeah, it's not entirely emo, but it's a good narration and you have a good voice for the role, methinks. I think you can incorporate the "sounding emo" bits more of when he's talking. Otherwise, in the narration, the brooding kind of does it for you.

I think the beginning sounds better than the end. In the beginning you're a little more drifty and thoughtful about the way you talk, and as you go on you start almost sounding Jake-esque. If that makes any sense...

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Re: line test
« Reply #14 on: June 10, 2008, 04:04:25 AM »
shanker, your david was pretty good-better than mine. *sigh* Guess I'm not very good at being abrasive...whatever that means.
do you want the part for david. I'd like to be david, but if it's better for the audibook, I'll let you have it.


your tobias...well let's just say it's not exactly how i'd picture him to sound like. Or maybe I'm just bad at guessing what people sound like...it's possible.