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« on: November 27, 2008, 12:04:39 PM »
I told goom that one of his poems inspired me to write a poem....I have no idea where that poem is now or what thread it was in, so I'll post it here. It's kinda modeled after the poem he posted. ^^ i'm still editing it, so constructive criticism is welcome...unless you just want to criticize...haha

My Best Friend

November 27, 2008

When I was six, my mother said,
don’t go wandering in the mall
Being young and not too bright,
I did not do what she said at all.
I ended up getting lost,
And learned my lesson in the end,
That’s when I listened to my mother,
And told the story to my best friend.

When I was fourteen, and still dumb,
I thought I’d try to be fresh in school.
Eventually I got in trouble,
But I only thought that that was cool.
I never confessed to my parents,
But I did tell one person in the end,
Though my parents worried about me,
The only person I told was my best friend.

When I was nineteen, and more mature,
I regretted the stupid things I did.
So many lost opportunities,
And so many subtle secrets I hid.
Because of this I withdrew,
and thought these regrets I could mend.
However, one person saw right through me,
And that person was my best friend.

When I was twenty two I fell in love,
With a girl who I admired quite a bit,
But I knew she already had someone,
So she couldn’t possibly be interested.
It hurt me bad, and I felt alone,
I tried to be happy, but it was all pretend,
I had no one to talk to about it because,
The girl I loved was my best friend.
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Re: poem
« Reply #1 on: November 27, 2008, 03:20:40 PM »
awesome poem.

what helps me is to read my poetry out loud.
if it doesn't sound good read out loud, i usually change it.
i tend to like alliteration and rhyme, and also patterns (like yours).

very good. ;)

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Re: poem
« Reply #2 on: November 27, 2008, 04:13:30 PM »
*claps* Oooh good job sweetie!...the ending part is sad though :( But yeah, I meant in a good way...well done poem^^.

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Re: poem
« Reply #3 on: November 27, 2008, 04:14:19 PM »
hahaha, yeah, i know. thanks! i'm wondering if I should end it on a sad note...

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Re: poem
« Reply #4 on: November 28, 2008, 06:34:02 PM »
Awww thank you :-*

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« Reply #5 on: December 03, 2008, 10:24:58 AM »
thats great man ..that was really awesome

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« Reply #6 on: December 03, 2008, 10:29:33 AM »
thanks!
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Re: poem
« Reply #7 on: December 18, 2008, 04:04:21 PM »
Very well done. :)
The universe is, instant by instant, re-created anew. There is, in truth, no Past, only a memory of the Past. Blink your eyes, and the world you see next did not exist when you closed them. The only appropriate state of the mind is surprise. The only appropriate state of the heart is joy. The sky you see now, you have never seen before. The perfect moment is now. Be glad of it.

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Re: poem
« Reply #8 on: December 18, 2008, 04:14:12 PM »
I like it!  Nice job.
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Re: poem
« Reply #9 on: December 18, 2008, 04:45:18 PM »
Very good.  :clap: :thumbsup:

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« Reply #10 on: December 18, 2008, 09:33:55 PM »
awww..thanks you guys! I love you all!

*hugs everyone*

sry, I'm in the christmas spirit right now.^^
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« Reply #11 on: December 19, 2008, 11:26:02 AM »
That's not necessarily a bad thing.
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« Reply #12 on: January 15, 2009, 12:57:43 AM »
This poem was written today after thinking about how many of my friendships have faded over the past few years

Optimistically Forward




Remember the old days? The old ways? When innocence and childhood
seemed like all play, and hope stretched out in all ways?
When summer stretched forever, things were light and carefree,
The sun seemed to always shine through gray clouds eventually,
When doom and gloom were carried away by the sound of laughter,
And troubles and tears always seemed to be so trivial after.
Remember sitting on the tree, wondering where we’d be in ten years?
Never guessing the situations we’d find ourselves in here.
When hanging together simply meant playing tag and games,
And we’d have fun together no matter what we were playing.
But alas, time travels, streams, rushes, and flows on,
And what we have are just these memories to go on.

Remember when we’d go to the dances and have a crazy time,
Then do something stupid afterwards thinking we were out of line?
At least that’s what we thought, none of this day to day surviving,
When friends weren’t killed in gang violence or killed through drunk driving.
Remember those school projects we did, the talks that we had?
Or when the worst distraught we’d have was with our dads?
Remember Disneyland, or hanging out everyday by the beach?
When dreams and impossible goals all seemed within reach?
The wind was steady, sand castles were seen aplenty,
And experimenting and having fun just came so readily.
Remember screaming our heads off at our high school football games?
Remember late night chats on-line, or dancing crazily in the rain?

Every time I remember you, I think of then.
Not that things are much worse now,
But how come you’re not here to share new memories again?
We can’t live those memories now,
We look to the future optimistically,
Believing and learning from the past
that the sun will shine through eventually.
There’s nowhere to go now but forward, the good times aren’t yet over.
Faith in the future means looking ahead and not letting expectations be lowered.




Can’t look back, there’s nothing there for us now,
Except remembrances that can potentially tie us down.
The past is to be learned from, not to be lived in,
So learn from it, and hope for more blessings like the ones we’ve been given.




Where’d you go?
I miss you so,
seems like it’s been forever, since you’ve been gone.
Where’d you go?
I miss you so,
Seems like it’s been forever, since you’ve been gone,
Please come back home…

Please come back home…

Please come back home…

Please come back home…

Please come back home…


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Re: poem
« Reply #13 on: March 09, 2009, 12:59:34 AM »
one more.

I wrote this poem after I found out a close friend of mine died and passed away after a struggle with an illness. I think it accurately represents what I went through, and hopefully, it communicates something of comfort to people. and so in a way, its to everyone of you who has had a close person to them pass away...



One phone call, changing all,
One phone call, like before.
Now reality’s call
Settles in, ringing more.

Another soul home to heaven,
Another dear friend of mine
To meet the Savior who will say then,
“Welcome home, its time”.

It’s sad to see the good times go,
It’s bitter to see death’s face,
When brightness turns to gray and old,
And the high runs out the race.

To remember there was someone alive and well,
But now seems without a trace,
Is one of death’s most bitter trails
It leaves behind in place.

Life goes on, that’s the way it seems
And it does beyond the veil!
Death is a step to beyond our dreams
To a place where heaven dwells.

Sometimes it’s hard to remember,
That we have nothing to fear,
That the soul in us is forever,
And God is always near.

So as my tears hit my pillow,
God, testify to me again,
Please, O Lord, let me know,
The sweet comfort that comes within Thy plan.
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Re: poem
« Reply #14 on: March 09, 2009, 03:30:13 PM »
Those are good.  Sad, but really good.  The Optimistically Forward one sounds like it would fit well as a song.
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« Reply #15 on: March 09, 2009, 03:46:07 PM »
they are all great poems, you have a skill that few do
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« Reply #16 on: March 09, 2009, 11:44:56 PM »
sorry for the religious references. I didn't even realize that those were in there.

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« Reply #17 on: January 15, 2010, 12:57:12 PM »
 Just You


Here we sit, uncomfortably,
What would you have me believe?
So will you stay or will you leave?
I guess the choice is ours.

The sun will set, eventually,
Indigo eternity,
On endless sea, with you and me,
But will we choose the stars?

Destiny is what we make it,
Choice is ours, so don’t delay it,
Fate is nice, but unrelated

So I’ll be choosing,

Charity is real forever,
You and me, should be together,
Night will come, as sure as ever

But I’ll be choosing, just you…



Regretfully, you had to see,
Not the best side or part of me,
I offer my apologies
You caught me unprepared

You loved me, and I liked you,
But shining lights confused my view,
and though I grew, was in my youth,
To you it was unfair…

Destiny was what I made it,
Choice was mine, but I delayed it,
Path was clear, but I debated,

But who I’m choosing

Wish I could, punch a dial,
Turn back time, to stay awhile,
Change the past, or gain some miles,

But who I’m choosing, is you
Just you..


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« Reply #18 on: January 15, 2010, 10:25:01 PM »
awesome stuff Azure! love te poems

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« Reply #19 on: January 16, 2010, 05:06:43 PM »
It's been a while since you posted one.

I really like it.  Very beautiful :)
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Re: poem
« Reply #20 on: August 31, 2010, 07:57:13 PM »
Who is the Answer?


I’ve been moving around so much, that it gets hard to keep in touch
With whom I am because ends of me are scattered in different friends, cause see
if we have different identities with certain friends acting differently,
Then who are we really in the end when you’re reflected in people you see endlessly?

Is this the feel of forever? Netted separately together?
I feel like a feather in the wind, don’t know where I will rest in the end.
But if they say when you lose yourself is when you actually find yourself,
then isn’t the key to your self-discovery being lost in truly discovering others?


Even though I’m pretty used to me, it’s hard to think who I used to be.
Is it the world shifting and changing or the way I view it that’s rearranging?
Or both? Can I try to be my own thing Without feeling like interacting?
or is the meaning of being human interacting with other human beings?


All I mean is this,
I just want to mean something,
To someone somewhere
to matter while here.
And isn’t that our big dream?
For someone to care,
or always be there?


Maybe its in myself
To change and to try
To feel more alive.
Maybe its me as well,
To see someone else,
And be there to help.

So this is the question
Who is the answer?
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