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Re-release editing/changes
« on: July 22, 2010, 04:23:23 AM »
Since the re-release of the series was announced people have wondered what changes, if any, will be made to the content of the series. All that has been confirmed thus far is new 3D morphing cover-art; and KA/Grant have stated that they are not (at least at this point) behind such decisions and are not even involved in the re-release; and that current Scholastic staff were mostly not around back when Animorphs was first being released.

I myself would guess that the content will largely be the same, with editing of mistakes made as well as perhaps minor changes to 'modernize' material that has become outdated. Still, with a fair amount of time (about a year) before the publishing date there is still certainly room for that to change as current Scholastic editors/publishers familiarize themselves further with the series. Some fans have wondered whether there will be additional stories or further developed back-stories. Others have expressed enough dissatisfaction with the ending of the series to hope that it is changed. There is also the possibility of changing existing content not just for outdated material but to correct KASUs, though this could be limited to some types and not others or large sweeping changes (changing large storyline aspects to create more reasonable or plausible situations or simply changing early minor stray bits of dialog/narration to reflect later established canon material).

Anyways, as I started to reply in the http://animorphsforum.com/forum/index.php?topic=5243.30 thread, I started to mention on the side what I think would be the best single, simple change that could be made; but it developed into its own rant (which I will keep in spoiler tags here for those who don't care to read my thoughts and my change) and cause me to wonder about what changes Ani fans would like to see most in the series and conversely what things to you fear re-releasers will change that you couldn't bear to see?

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The rant is this: The single greatest thing an editor could do in the Animorphs re-release is get the text of the entire series in a single document, hit Ctrl-F and "Replace All" the word 'sentient' with 'sapient' (and 'sentience' with 'sapience' and so on); then casually insert correct usage of the term sentient in a few appropriate conversations throughout the series. I know being too nit-picky can be annoying, but the misuse of the term 'sentient' is the most annoying ongoing problem in sci-fi for the last half century.

'Sentience' describes having a sense or senses and a consciousness that allows one to perceive/feel/experience that sense subjectively (what is referred to as experiencing 'qualia');as opposed to other aspects of being a conscious entity such as being self-aware, intelligent so on.

'Sapience' describes what is often simply called 'wisdom', a level of intelligent thought and the ability to use that intelligence to make judgments on the values of something (either in terms of right/wrong values or useful/useless). This can be distinct from intelligence itself, but it is generally meant to imply an average human or almost human-level intelligence as a basic requirement.

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Humans are sapient (by virtue of the fact that we defined the necessary level of intelligence if nothing else) and they are also sentient.

If an alien is encountered who is capable of interacting with us on our level of intelligence, we can say determine that they are not only sentient (have senses) but sapient; so we can think of them as being their own persons when we normally only us the term 'person' for humans.

A machine may be said to have 'senses' in a loose use of the word in that it is able to accept some type of inputs (electrical or otherwise like a temperature or motion detecting probe), but even if you say that it has a set of 'senses' and is capable of preforming a predefined set of responses it doesn't follow that it is sentient because it did not actually have a consciousness that could 'experience' the sense (even storing the input in some form of 'memory' doesn't make it so in and of itself) and those studying AI and computing wonder about developing a machine that has either sentience or sapience.

Dogs, Cats, Rats and most animals that immediately come to mind are sentient because we can observe enough awareness (but not necessary self-awareness) of the things they experience (they experience it); but they are not sapient.

Scientists studying dolphins might debate whether they, though not as intelligent as humans, are conscious enough in a way to deem them sapient (allowing a definition that isn't quite as high an intelligence as an average human), but dolphins are clearly sentient.

Scientists studying ants would have no problem concluding that they are not sapient, but might debate whether ants are even sentient, because even though they live and function biologically in an individual sense their brains may not have enough capability for them to be even truly aware, it might be that their brains just function as a simple automatic set of responses to various stimuli (a biological version of the above described machine).

Anyways, the confusion between these clearly different terms in sci-fi started more than half a century ago and I presume that it happened something like this:

In the mid-20th century, in the dawn of computing, sci-fi authors began studying the possibilities of the science of computing to develop to the point of machines taking input with complex enough sensory probes and making decisions with complex enough systems of routines and calculations with so many layers of sub-routines and abstractions that the machines were in no way distinguishable from consciousness, intelligence and all the other aspects that makes a human a 'person'. In short, sci-fi authors dreamed up the idea of robots.

These sci-fi authors had a reasonable amount of scientific (and perhaps in some instances philosophical as well) knowledge to have narrations and dialogs with vocabulary that involved terms that describe these robots; such as having characters discuss whether there were ethical obligations or needs for laws to give robots rights because they had gradually gained sentience, they might even debate whether this sentience meant that the robots were actually 'alive' and what exactly it means to be living.

This was also a time when sci-fi was beginning to reach large general audiences rather than the limited niches of science and sci-fi magazines. Their readers, many themselves potential aspiring writers picked up the term 'sentience' from the use in early 'robot' sci-fi, but since the term 'sentience' was used about fictional robots who were not only conscious in a way that allowed debating their sentience, but also were able to understand and interact with 'sapience' readers without scientific backgrounds added the term 'sentient' to their vocabulary thinking it implied what should be called 'sapience'; and without any everyday usage in their lives they had no way learn the correction to this misunderstanding.

This lead to new aspiring writers to take this term that they picked up and use it; sometimes correctly by chance that the cases they were using them in were also to describe something that was both sapient and sentient, but often incorrectly discussing things being sentient or not when they should be discussing whether they are sapient or not. Perpetuating this leads to authors like KA, who is fascinated with the philosophy of behind the subjective experience writing about the subjective experience of animal bodies and minds; she has need more than many sci-fi authors before her to be able to correctly describe these things; but instead, having been mislead by years of mistake within sci-fi, she constantly uses the term 'sentient' when she should use 'sapient' (They should say 'The Hork-Bajir aren't that smart by human standards, but they are sapient' or the Drode should say 'It turns out that Orca falls just this side of sapient by our terms and is protected within the terms of the Ellimist/Crayak game and should go out of their way to discuss the relative levels of understanding, awareness and sentience of their morphs, particularly the simple ones like ants and termites).

Now in this forum and other mediums for discussing both the sciences and philosophies about life and intelligence everyone uses the term 'sentience' incorrectly and doesn't even have the word 'sapience' in their vocabulary; through no fault of their own inadequately describing aspects of alien sapience and animal sentience. It is particulary annoying in threads like the http://animorphsforum.com/forum/index.php?topic=5243.30 thread, where we are both discussing the Yeerks choice in hosts and various aspects of their sensory abilities and intelligence with inadequate terms to discuss one while misapplying one word to the other concept.
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So, there was my change as well as quite the rant about why it really is that big a deal when it could be seen as a silly nit-picky thought. So what do ya'll think? Would you desperately love to see the ending change, or are there those who were plenty dissatisfied about the ending but wouldn't want to take the author's creation away from her? Should those outdated references be preserved as quaint, but beloved nostalgic memories or updated to relate to a new young audience? Other thoughts or suggestions on possible changes you'd be interested in seeing that I haven't thought of?
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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #1 on: July 22, 2010, 09:54:31 AM »
I don't think they should change too much the references... Look, if they change the references to, for example, singers, TV shows and consoles, they'll have to say the story happens later (2005~2010), and then problem may appear (Internet, mobile phones...). Other novels have references to things we don't really know now, but I think it's OK, we can understand...

What I'd like they change is:
- the mistakes and KASU, as much as they can;
- longer ending with more explanations about what happens next (maybe in the Animorphs 2.0, I don't care, but I'd like to know what happens to the Yeerks, how the war continues on the other planets, how Humans and Andalites live together, what happens to the Human who can morph (Controllers who could morph and now are free), etc.)
- if they don't want to release all the volumes, they should forget some of the ghost-written volumes, like the second Helmacron book...
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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #2 on: July 22, 2010, 10:01:36 AM »
This is from the letter AppleGrant sent Richard:

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An editor at Scholastic is combing the first two books for outdated references, sending suggested fixes, and asking us to approve. Which we've now done.

Clearly they are somewhat involved in the process and outdated references are, at the very least, being deleted if not updated entirely.

Interesting points about sentience and sapience, though. I never knew that. :) Lesson learned.

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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #3 on: July 22, 2010, 10:10:16 AM »
If KAA&MG work on the modification of the outdated references, then it'll be better. But I still think they should take care of the new KASU who can appear...
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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #4 on: July 22, 2010, 12:03:01 PM »
I don't think they should change too much the references... Look, if they change the references to, for example, singers, TV shows and consoles, they'll have to say the story happens later (2005~2010), and then problem may appear (Internet, mobile phones...).

I agree.  If they try and modernize everything without changing the plot, all of the new readers will be constantly wondering why the Animorphs don't just use their cell phones and solve a whole lot of communication problems.  Plus, maybe I'm a purist, but I would be really sad if the new releases were that altered from their original state.  I'm planning on buying about ten of the new releases to finish up my collection, but I don't really want them if they're gonna be about hacking Visser 3's Twitter account and loosing an angry crocodile on Justin Bieber. (well... maybe. ;D)  I mean, I'll still throw the money at Scholastic because I NEEEEED 2.0 to happen, but still.  Would be nice to get something I could really lurve and cherish.

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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #5 on: July 22, 2010, 12:09:55 PM »
I hope they don't try to modernize it. If they want to do that, they might as well remake it. I don't think they'll do much. They're just trying to rerelease the series with a few tweaks to see if there's still a fanbase for it.


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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #6 on: July 22, 2010, 12:49:23 PM »
On one hand, part of its charm to me is that those are the pop culture references I grew up with (The Offspring, Alanis Morissette, X-Files, Powerpuff Girls). That said, if they're trying to appeal to the third graders of today, it'll definitely help them to update at least those references (so The Killers, Rihanna, Heroes and Kim Possible? I can totally see Marco watching a Kim Possible marathon).

And part of me has always been curious about the Animorphs' take on Lady Gaga, Mad Men and Michael Cera.

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« Reply #7 on: July 22, 2010, 01:41:11 PM »
Visser Three's Twitter account? :rofl:

I don't think they're going to do too much modernizing as far as replacing band names and whatnot. But I think they'll take out references that won't be understood. And honestly I think that AppleGrant will use their own kids as the guinea pigs, since Jake at least seems to be fairly involved in their work.

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« Reply #8 on: July 22, 2010, 01:44:38 PM »
Aniviel, don't buy the new release just to give them money. If they change too much the books, take the old edition, so it'll fit with your other volumes.

I understand if they want to change some references, because young kids won't understand some of them, about TV shows who disappeared for example... but they should be careful ^^' It's always dangerous...
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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #9 on: July 22, 2010, 02:47:10 PM »
Honestly I don't really care if they update references or not. Actually, I'm for it. I agree with what LisaCharily said, being a fan of the series when they were being published in the 90's I'll feel more connection or whatever to the old references and stuff, but I guess for the re-release the whole point is to gain newer fans and what better way to do that then update things they can relate better to? The only issue I do see, as others stated, is the whole advancement of technology and social network things available now that weren't available then, but I'm sure they'll find a way around it (or just ignore it). I'm probably going to get the books again when they're re-released just to see what got changed to what and for the new covers and stuff, but I'm glad I still have my originals. 
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« Reply #10 on: July 22, 2010, 03:38:56 PM »
And if they change too many things, we'll have to make the "Ebooks new release" after we finish the current Ebooks lol ;)
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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #11 on: July 22, 2010, 05:38:47 PM »
If they're trying to reach a younger fan-base, then they definitely should update the pop-culture references and the technology to an extent. Especially the computer stuff. Since the kids are in middle school, they could get away with them not having cell phones.

I agree with what Kotetsu put in his spoiler. That's something that has always bugged me. Though I have a feeling that they won't since most kids aren't going to know the difference.

The one thing that bothers me the ABSOLUTE MOST in the books, is the fact that it seems like the authors didn't really have an understanding of general animal physiology. There are some descriptions in the morphing sequences that irk me, specifically, the "backwards-pointing knee" bits. Sometimes when they morph animals like the wolf, for example, they describe the knee cracking and bending backwards. The joint it's forming is actually the ANKLE. I know... that's being really nit-picky, but it's always bugged me.

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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #12 on: July 22, 2010, 06:10:21 PM »
The one thing that bothers me the ABSOLUTE MOST in the books, is the fact that it seems like the authors didn't really have an understanding of general animal physiology. There are some descriptions in the morphing sequences that irk me, specifically, the "backwards-pointing knee" bits. Sometimes when they morph animals like the wolf, for example, they describe the knee cracking and bending backwards. The joint it's forming is actually the ANKLE. I know... that's being really nit-picky, but it's always bugged me.

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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #13 on: July 22, 2010, 11:05:25 PM »
The one thing that bothers me the ABSOLUTE MOST in the books, is the fact that it seems like the authors didn't really have an understanding of general animal physiology. There are some descriptions in the morphing sequences that irk me, specifically, the "backwards-pointing knee" bits. Sometimes when they morph animals like the wolf, for example, they describe the knee cracking and bending backwards. The joint it's forming is actually the ANKLE. I know... that's being really nit-picky, but it's always bugged me.

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I think this little detail bothered other people as well. I remember it being brought up in the LJ community.
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Re: Re-release editing/changes
« Reply #14 on: July 22, 2010, 11:12:52 PM »
Since the re-release of the series was announced people have wondered what changes, if any, will be made to the content of the series. All that has been confirmed thus far is new 3D morphing cover-art; and KA/Grant have stated that they are not (at least at this point) behind such decisions and are not even involved in the re-release; and that current Scholastic staff were mostly not around back when Animorphs was first being released.

I myself would guess that the content will largely be the same, with editing of mistakes made as well as perhaps minor changes to 'modernize' material that has become outdated. Still, with a fair amount of time (about a year) before the publishing date there is still certainly room for that to change as current Scholastic editors/publishers familiarize themselves further with the series. Some fans have wondered whether there will be additional stories or further developed back-stories. Others have expressed enough dissatisfaction with the ending of the series to hope that it is changed. There is also the possibility of changing existing content not just for outdated material but to correct KASUs, though this could be limited to some types and not others or large sweeping changes (changing large storyline aspects to create more reasonable or plausible situations or simply changing early minor stray bits of dialog/narration to reflect later established canon material).

Anyways, as I started to reply in the http://animorphsforum.com/forum/index.php?topic=5243.30 thread, I started to mention on the side what I think would be the best single, simple change that could be made; but it developed into its own rant (which I will keep in spoiler tags here for those who don't care to read my thoughts and my change) and cause me to wonder about what changes Ani fans would like to see most in the series and conversely what things to you fear re-releasers will change that you couldn't bear to see?

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The rant is this: The single greatest thing an editor could do in the Animorphs re-release is get the text of the entire series in a single document, hit Ctrl-F and "Replace All" the word 'sentient' with 'sapient' (and 'sentience' with 'sapience' and so on); then casually insert correct usage of the term sentient in a few appropriate conversations throughout the series. I know being too nit-picky can be annoying, but the misuse of the term 'sentient' is the most annoying ongoing problem in sci-fi for the last half century.

'Sentience' describes having a sense or senses and a consciousness that allows one to perceive/feel/experience that sense subjectively (what is referred to as experiencing 'qualia');as opposed to other aspects of being a conscious entity such as being self-aware, intelligent so on.

'Sapience' describes what is often simply called 'wisdom', a level of intelligent thought and the ability to use that intelligence to make judgments on the values of something (either in terms of right/wrong values or useful/useless). This can be distinct from intelligence itself, but it is generally meant to imply an average human or almost human-level intelligence as a basic requirement.

Clarifying examples:

Humans are sapient (by virtue of the fact that we defined the necessary level of intelligence if nothing else) and they are also sentient.

If an alien is encountered who is capable of interacting with us on our level of intelligence, we can say determine that they are not only sentient (have senses) but sapient; so we can think of them as being their own persons when we normally only us the term 'person' for humans.

A machine may be said to have 'senses' in a loose use of the word in that it is able to accept some type of inputs (electrical or otherwise like a temperature or motion detecting probe), but even if you say that it has a set of 'senses' and is capable of preforming a predefined set of responses it doesn't follow that it is sentient because it did not actually have a consciousness that could 'experience' the sense (even storing the input in some form of 'memory' doesn't make it so in and of itself) and those studying AI and computing wonder about developing a machine that has either sentience or sapience.

Dogs, Cats, Rats and most animals that immediately come to mind are sentient because we can observe enough awareness (but not necessary self-awareness) of the things they experience (they experience it); but they are not sapient.

Scientists studying dolphins might debate whether they, though not as intelligent as humans, are conscious enough in a way to deem them sapient (allowing a definition that isn't quite as high an intelligence as an average human), but dolphins are clearly sentient.

Scientists studying ants would have no problem concluding that they are not sapient, but might debate whether ants are even sentient, because even though they live and function biologically in an individual sense their brains may not have enough capability for them to be even truly aware, it might be that their brains just function as a simple automatic set of responses to various stimuli (a biological version of the above described machine).

Anyways, the confusion between these clearly different terms in sci-fi started more than half a century ago and I presume that it happened something like this:

In the mid-20th century, in the dawn of computing, sci-fi authors began studying the possibilities of the science of computing to develop to the point of machines taking input with complex enough sensory probes and making decisions with complex enough systems of routines and calculations with so many layers of sub-routines and abstractions that the machines were in no way distinguishable from consciousness, intelligence and all the other aspects that makes a human a 'person'. In short, sci-fi authors dreamed up the idea of robots.

These sci-fi authors had a reasonable amount of scientific (and perhaps in some instances philosophical as well) knowledge to have narrations and dialogs with vocabulary that involved terms that describe these robots; such as having characters discuss whether there were ethical obligations or needs for laws to give robots rights because they had gradually gained sentience, they might even debate whether this sentience meant that the robots were actually 'alive' and what exactly it means to be living.

This was also a time when sci-fi was beginning to reach large general audiences rather than the limited niches of science and sci-fi magazines. Their readers, many themselves potential aspiring writers picked up the term 'sentience' from the use in early 'robot' sci-fi, but since the term 'sentience' was used about fictional robots who were not only conscious in a way that allowed debating their sentience, but also were able to understand and interact with 'sapience' readers without scientific backgrounds added the term 'sentient' to their vocabulary thinking it implied what should be called 'sapience'; and without any everyday usage in their lives they had no way learn the correction to this misunderstanding.

This lead to new aspiring writers to take this term that they picked up and use it; sometimes correctly by chance that the cases they were using them in were also to describe something that was both sapient and sentient, but often incorrectly discussing things being sentient or not when they should be discussing whether they are sapient or not. Perpetuating this leads to authors like KA, who is fascinated with the philosophy of behind the subjective experience writing about the subjective experience of animal bodies and minds; she has need more than many sci-fi authors before her to be able to correctly describe these things; but instead, having been mislead by years of mistake within sci-fi, she constantly uses the term 'sentient' when she should use 'sapient' (They should say 'The Hork-Bajir aren't that smart by human standards, but they are sapient' or the Drode should say 'It turns out that Orca falls just this side of sapient by our terms and is protected within the terms of the Ellimist/Crayak game and should go out of their way to discuss the relative levels of understanding, awareness and sentience of their morphs, particularly the simple ones like ants and termites).

Now in this forum and other mediums for discussing both the sciences and philosophies about life and intelligence everyone uses the term 'sentience' incorrectly and doesn't even have the word 'sapience' in their vocabulary; through no fault of their own inadequately describing aspects of alien sapience and animal sentience. It is particulary annoying in threads like the http://animorphsforum.com/forum/index.php?topic=5243.30 thread, where we are both discussing the Yeerks choice in hosts and various aspects of their sensory abilities and intelligence with inadequate terms to discuss one while misapplying one word to the other concept.
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So, there was my change as well as quite the rant about why it really is that big a deal when it could be seen as a silly nit-picky thought. So what do ya'll think? Would you desperately love to see the ending change, or are there those who were plenty dissatisfied about the ending but wouldn't want to take the author's creation away from her? Should those outdated references be preserved as quaint, but beloved nostalgic memories or updated to relate to a new young audience? Other thoughts or suggestions on possible changes you'd be interested in seeing that I haven't thought of?

I agree with the sentience vs. sapience thing, however, I don't remember how often or if at all it showed up in the first two books. However, assuming the publish went well it would be very nice if they fixed the more glaring things such as this.

References I don't mind if they're updated but I hope they make both prints available for eReaders :-/
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